• Sorry, it’s just too Predator for me.

  • I like that it’s sci-fi, and I like that he is bamboozled at first, but I see no tangible emotion that compels me to read the screenplay. Maybe if there were a greater focus on what exactly stands in his way. It […]

  • I like that the story has so much potential.

    I don’t like the use of two protagonists (better to focus on one main lead, unless there is some extremely good reason to split our emotional reservoirs in […]

  • The-Student commented on the post, RRH 4 years, 10 months ago

    I like the irony in that she’s unwittingly advancing something she’s fighting against – that’s clever, but it will take some rewrites before the grammar pans out. Message me if you want some suggestions.

  • The description “intertwining seduction” needs to be removed – it’s too hard to visualize.

    “Leaves a violent past” suggests that she gives up on violence, so how does she exact revenge – by non-violence? […]

  • If it’s funny anything will do, but I’d say pass on this concept.

  • ““even Wikipedia incorrectly references film in its description of what a logline is.”

    What does this mean?” – jusork

    jusork, do you recognize that there is a difference between a novel logline and a […]

  • The-Student posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    In reply to: The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo melroggins said: “people, like you … get to tear fellow writers to pieces rather than be open to actually using these exchanges as an exercise in polishing […] View

    I just realized something. I guess you’re interpreting the low scores I’m giving to your loglines therefore assuming that I don’t like your story ideas? That’s preposterous! I didn’t even realize this is what you were talking about until it just dawned on me. Anyway, I was only judging the quality of the LOGLINE which is what the fuck you’re…[Read more]

  • The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo 5 years, 2 months ago

    melroggins said:

    “people, like you … get to tear fellow writers to pieces rather than be open to actually using these exchanges as an exercise in polishing material.”

    What The-Student actually heard […]

  • The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo 5 years, 2 months ago

    Well, no wonder everyone on this website is confused. Don’t feel bad. I just looked and even Wikipedia incorrectly references film in its description of what a logline is. I’ll be fixing that, but for now, read […]

  • Well, no wonder everyone on this website is confused. Don’t feel bad. I just looked and even Wikipedia incorrectly references film in its description of what a logline is. I’ll be fixing that, but for now, read […]

  • The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo 5 years, 2 months ago

    It is not my intent to sound mean, or insensitive, or anything of the sort. Personally, I seek the truth, and if the truth hurts so be it. I learn. I move on a wiser man.

    There seems to be some confusion […]

  • The-Student posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    In reply to: jusork commented on the post, The Magic Circle Your explanation that it’s all in our pre-understanding of the story’s genre is still a far out implication, especially for the important piece of information that is […] View

    Right. But, I think you were one of the ones saying he didn’t define conflict, and I’m saying he most certainly did because of the genre implications. I guess we’ll just keep going until one of us tires. I’m getting there =)

  • The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo 5 years, 2 months ago

    I don’t disagree that it needs to be (and probably can be) shortened. I’ll continue to work on it and see what I can do.

    I really appreciate you saying you’d like to read the screenplay – that’s what this is […]

  • The-Student posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    In reply to: jusork commented on the post, The Magic Circle Your explanation that it’s all in our pre-understanding of the story’s genre is still a far out implication, especially for the important piece of information that is […] View

    I’m willing to stay with you here, but I need you to really think about this. I’m willing to answer as many questions as you may have.

    If you start from the beginning of this thread, you’ll notice that you made this comment:

    “a logline should be able to stand on its own, completely independent of the genre description. Many query letters might…[Read more]

  • The-Student posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    In reply to: jusork commented on the post, The Magic Circle Your explanation that it’s all in our pre-understanding of the story’s genre is still a far out implication, especially for the important piece of information that is […] View

    You missed my point, but that’s okay. I’m not here to argue. We can just agree to disagree?

  • The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo 5 years, 2 months ago

    melroggins, those questions are to be left for the screenplay itself. The logline is just supposed to give a VERY brief description on genre, main character, and plot while generating enough interest for the […]

  • The-Student commented on the post, Baby Evo 5 years, 2 months ago

    benjjjamin, thank you sincerely for that. I have put a lot of work into it. I can’t wait to share this story.

  • I really hope you’re joking about the metaphor I used because you’re trying really hard to come across as though you need no help with your writing whatsoever. But, just in case you aren’t joking (which is fine […]

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