• RikerBear posted a new activity comment 1 year, 11 months ago

    In reply to: RikerBear wrote a new post, The Uncles – Love is Love On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a […] View

    Have you had a chance to reread the script?

    Thanks
    Mark

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 1 year, 11 months ago

    In reply to: RikerBear wrote a new post, The Uncles – Love is Love On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a […] View

    I believe you have conservative confused with religious bigot. But thank you for your opinion none the less.

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 1 year, 11 months ago

    In reply to: RikerBear wrote a new post, The Uncles – Love is Love On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a […] View

    Done and Done :-)

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: RikerBear wrote a new post, The Uncles – Love is Love On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a […] View

    I’ve done another edit and taken a lot of your suggestions to heart – not only does it flow better but you saved me 12 pages of ‘crap’! Thank you!
    New edit has been uploaded
    Thank you again

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: RikerBear wrote a new post, The Uncles – Love is Love On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a […] View

    Thank you! These are wonderful notes – looks like I have some more work to do

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: RikerBear wrote a new post, The Uncles – Love is Love On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a […] View

    What’s wrong with the format?

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: raydavenport wrote a new post, Pandorah’s Box The story revolves around a female women’s correctional officer by the name of Pandorah Sobowski who gets entrapped with four prison trustees in a bizarre blackmail p […] View

    Interesting story, but seems very similar to many many others. Writing could use some work, as there are a good many unnecessary words especially in the logline.
    Keep working on it – you may just have something here

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, S After his eons-long rebellion against God, the Devil wants to repent and enlists the assistance of an unconventional Kansas City preacher, placing him and his family in mortal danger—as w […] View

    I am certainly intrigued – I wish to read more

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, Scroll Back An adventurer users a scroll to travel back in time to validate the Resurrection of Christ, but losing memory with time travel may not allow him to bring back the truth to a […] View

    Needs a lot of work I’m afraid. Mildly interesting idea however

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: raydavenport wrote a new post, SWIFT Three armored trucks are robbed and an undercover federal agent is murdered in the process and a ring of underground street racer Lesbians called the Rainbow Gang are framed. […] View

    Excellent! Excited to see where this one goes!

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, Working Title When a lonesome groundskeeper falls into a coma, he discovers love in a opposite parallel universe, but must decide between granting a life, or to remain living but without any purpose. View

    Interesting idea, but it needs a lot more work in my opinion.

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, Race for the Galaxy The galaxy is under assault from a dark threat; an alien race called the Kalraki that invades, plunders and enslaves world after world. Chad, the selfish cyclebot racer, […] View

    Logline needs some polish for sure – to many unneeded words.
    Overall page one says to me the project is unfinished. Looks like it could use another rewrite or two.
    Great concept however! Really like the story idea

  • RikerBear posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, All of Lucy’s Lovers Young guy faces bankruptcy, possible divorce, a loss of a friend. When he finally reaches the absolute bottom in his life, he realizes there is only one way he can go […] View

    Interesting idea – not sure the dialogue is as polished as it could be. Doesn’t seem to flow naturally. My advise is to keep working on it some more

  • On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a beloved nephew.

  • On the eve of their 50th anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a beloved nephew.

  • Any life in the room? :-)

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