Lost here! Do yov win candy or a new car if you watch it? What generally happens if you watch it or what the heck does the station do? Clarify, rewrite, fix and just say what is generally happening and where it […]
Starts off good, then i wonder, what thd fudge does the sexy attorney have to do with anything?? Hand caught in what?? What the fudge did he do?? What is going on here?? Just rewrite it as he did something, got […]
This sound fantastic! I feel a lot of drama happening in the logline. This stuff happens in life so much that these kind of stories, if done well, can leave a profound touch on the audience. This logline is a […]
This is funny, potential, serious and painfully vague. Starts off awesome, then dies. Get rid of the lunch stuff, it’s funny, but flushes this potentially awesome logline down the toilet, just like the lunch.