This sounds very good. As long as you don’t make the serial killer a bit sympathetic or preachy towardoh he had a bad life so he kills now lol, then this will work in a mute sort of interesting way!

This sounds dark and interesting!

This could work. The genre of music taste can be respectfully ignored as long as the story is good. Go for it, thid has a chance imo.

I see potential here. The hook is decent. I think this does have a chance of selling even though I think the plot is average/decent for my taste. Anyway, good luck with this friend.

Lost here! Do yov win candy or a new car if you watch it? What generally happens if you watch it or what the heck does the station do? Clarify, rewrite, fix and just say what is generally happening and where it […]

Awesome logline! Thank goodness the werewolves (confederates) are the bad ones! Go union! This is great!!

Please mention jesus in the logline! THAT’S THE MONEY SHOT!! This is missimg a sense of is it a drama or comedy or both! Do the mention jesus thing, put in the tone and this has great potential.

Starts off good, then i wonder, what thd fudge does the sexy attorney have to do with anything?? Hand caught in what?? What the fudge did he do?? What is going on here?? Just rewrite it as he did something, got […]

This sound fantastic! I feel a lot of drama happening in the logline. This stuff happens in life so much that these kind of stories, if done well, can leave a profound touch on the audience. This logline is a […]

Missing the key point about the kid, who what where why, is this a dream? Anyway, i am totally interested though! Fix the kid part and you may have a memorable emotional drama!

The logline is great! Gives me all the general info needed to be interested. Nice work friend.

I agree with rickemg. Tweek the hook and you problubly have a winner. The forced to give it up doesn’t tell why. It’s his, screw the evil dad, go to a pawn shop! Anyway, massive potential.

Interesting! Not “blown” away overall ha ha, but could be worth a ticket. Potential is promising.

This is funny, potential, serious and painfully vague. Starts off awesome, then dies. Get rid of the lunch stuff, it’s funny, but flushes this potentially awesome logline down the toilet, just like the lunch.

I got lost. Has all the potential, but I got lost in this novel of logline. Shorten it please.

Nice potential. I hate spelling too, but It does take away from the flow. Good logline.