• marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 2 years, 9 months ago

    In reply to: marsed.harizi wrote a new post, War Without Army The mission to kill a freedom fighter, is transformed into a blood innocent massacre, by the order of a devilish military Colonel. Two boys left alive, will […] View

    Hi OmarTucker, Wovalle,

    Since English is not my first language I have had some problems on that issue.
    I’m trying to do my best, but for sure I will take under consideration all your advices.

    Thank You
    and
    Good luck!

    Marsed

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 2 years, 11 months ago

    In reply to: aweiss wrote a new post, Take A Trip Guy, who made his phone into a time/space machine, travels with his friends back to 1968 to enlist the help of hippies with Guy’s plan of saving the US, which in the present d […] View

    Hi,

    Since this is a script that combines sci-fiction, Drama, and that tries to express values that have mankind has pursued for centuries like: Freedom and Revolution, in my opinion you should have worked more on the title. TAKE A TRIP – is too soft.

    I like the concept, and it has a big potential. What I see that doesn’t work is the story…[Read more]

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 2 years, 11 months ago

    In reply to: raindjs wrote a new post, Checking Out, Checking In A successful but disillusioned reality TV producer loses his shows, his wife, his car and his father in one week, causing him to Check Out of life and Check In […] View

    Overall I think this story is above the average. It has the right potential to be put on the screen.

    I like the title. I believe that the first impression anyone in the writing business make is linked with the “sound of the title”. The title reflects precisely what is going on with Harvey’s life. His father got sick. He discovers that his…[Read more]

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 2 years, 11 months ago

    In reply to: stonepony wrote a new post, STONE PONY A true story about a U.S. Army combat soldier sent to fight in Vietnam in 1968. Within the first two weeks, he and his platoon experience a horrific “friendly fire” tragedy […] View

    Overall I think it has a good potential. At first the title didn’t hit me, but after you read the story, well you can literally picture it.

    What I like the most? Dialogue. Intense / true / investigation type.

    Good luck on the competition,

    Marsed

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 2 years, 11 months ago

    In reply to: AgimSopi wrote a new post, RAHELA Uka, the Albanian Muslim being mobilized from Nazism’s, and Rachel the Jewish woman, survives the period of Fascism with to much sacrifice and enters to the period of C […] View

    The script has a good title. It seems fair, and leaves a taste of mystery when you pronounce it.
    I agree that the format is not appropriate so it must be changed.

    Good luck in the competition.

    Te uroj sukses Agim,

    Marsed

  • The mission to kill a freedom fighter, is transformed into a blood innocent massacre, by the order of a devilish military Colonel. Two boys left alive, will infiltrate into his cantonment to seek their father’s revenge.

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, A Tale Untold When a struggling young writer finds himself in a mystical kingdom ruled by fantastical creatures, he becomes the center in a battle against a ruthless Half-Man Half-Ogre […] View

    Good luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, What The Boy Deserves !– br {mso-data-placement:same-cell;} –A reserved young man invites his girlfriend of 2.5 years to his parent’s 300 acre home and plans to propose since their home, […] View

    Good Luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: Laughterror wrote a new post, Forget Everything You Know A man accused of being a terrorist becomes a terrorist and discovers the true love. View

    Good Luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: regello wrote a new post, The CEO’s Wife After uncovering evidence of insider trading, a divorce-minded diva is booted off the estate of her investment guru husband, landing in a homeless shelter with no money or […] View

    Good Luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: Kyleigh_Ross wrote a new post, Through The Wire An unhappy wife wants to prove her husband is cheating. She hires a temptress to wear a wire and catch him being unfaithful, but what she hears through the wire is […] View

    Good luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: Rosie_Hakmon wrote a new post, Five days to live Ben woke up in the hospital after a serious car accident and was informed that he had five days to live. Following this news, he decided to do all the things he did […] View

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  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: J.D._Spivey wrote a new post, No Whites Allowed When white people become an oppressed minority in America, a conservative pundit becomes a civil rights activist fighting for the rights of white people. View

    Good Luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, Stranger !– br {mso-data-placement:same-cell;} –On the verge of a crucial internal investigation into his handling of a child abduction case, a troubled detective turns down an attractive […] View

    Good Luck!!!

  • marsed.harizi posted a new activity comment 3 years, 1 month ago

    In reply to: admin wrote a new post, Piano Man A young  musician, indebted to the mafia puts his life on the line to break free of their control and pursue his dreams of signing with a major record label. View

    Good Luck!!!

  • Haunted by the death of innocent souls, a devilish military Colonel will terrorize the country until every freedom fighter is vanished. Two boys left alive, will infiltrate into his cantonment to seek their father’s revenge.

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