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  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 6 months ago

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    Hi Ray,

    Congratulations. I’m grateful for the offer but unfortunately, due to filming I will have to pass.

    Good luck with this all, and all the best.

    Lee

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 7 months ago

    In reply to: leeoconnor wrote a new post, Whittington Manor An adaptation of the world war two love story novel, Whttington Manor. A young couple deep in love are torn apart by the unfortunate actions of world war two. A story […] View

    Thanks for your kind words Michael, I’m humbled.

    I am aware that there are a number of typos in the script but I am unable to upload another version at the moment.

    This did however get picked up by a producer in connection with the BBC but fell through so I am using all the necessary sites to get maximum exposure.

    Although I am a…[Read more]

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 8 months ago

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    Raymond you need to understand that universally all script are written in the same format.
    Clearly you are not understanding what I am saying.

    No I don’t wish to option your script nor do I want to be a co-writer, this story is not for me, not to mention it has been done before.

    I would recommend going away and doing some research and…[Read more]

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 8 months ago

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    Raymond it’s not about being a Lee O’Connor script or whatever, formats and structure do not change from script to script, they are all the same. It’s the story itself which has the personal touch here.

    The fact that your slugs, tenses and descriptions are wrong and read awkwardly makes for an amateur script, which is why it has not been…[Read more]

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 8 months ago

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    Just read the first few pages, still no change and still not properly formatted.

    Right I’m going to give you an example of how it should be written, this is your first paragraph –

    “There are many men walking around and talking in an open area, there is an older man wearing slacks and a colourful Floridian flowered shirt named PAULEY…[Read more]

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 8 months ago

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    Hi Raymond,

    As I strategically said in my first comment “I read the first few pages and that was enough for me” thus meaning the formatting was wrong.
    Regardless of how good a story is, if the formatting is not correct no one will give it the time of day.
    I have given you some examples of where you have gone wrong but it is really a case of…[Read more]

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  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 8 months ago

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    I disagree, the first line alone sets the weather, surroundings and when the character is introduced she is described.
    You can see plenty and hear plenty, so I’m not quite sure if you read the script properly, not too mention this is an adapted script not a shooting script.

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 9 months ago

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    Thanks for the suggestion, But the rating will stay the same. I will rate each and every script based on the first ten pages I read, if the formatting is wrong as well as the tenses or it just doesn’t work, then I will not commit my time to read the whole script.
    Truth be told I just don’t have time to read the whole script, so like any producer,…[Read more]

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 9 months ago

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    Fast pace, good concept. A little issues with formatting here and there but nothing major.

    For example, don’t put ‘flashback’ in your slug use a super.

    I only read the first few pages but it was well written.

    Thanks

    Lee O’Connor

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 9 months ago

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    Your logline needs a complete rewrite. It should NOT be a narrative, merely a sentence about the story.

    Your script also needs to be in proper format. This is not a screenplay, nor could it be used for a stage play. I would seriously consider looking at this script. No one will read this unless it is in proper format, regardless of…[Read more]

  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 9 months ago

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    Hi,

    Well written and moved in a nice pace for the 10 pages that I read.

    A few things that narked me but nothing major. It’s just little things like this ” Elder
    Cap speaks to someone out of frame”

    Thats not needed, so I would recommend losing it. Just little direction like that, that will put the script down.

    Hope this helps.

    Lee O’Connor

  • An adaptation of the world war two love story novel, Whttington Manor. A young couple deep in love are torn apart by the unfortunate actions of world war two. A story filled with love, misery, regret and hope, […]

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  • leeoconnor posted a new activity comment 2 years, 9 months ago

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    Hi Sasha,

    I read the first ten pages, these are my thoughts on that.

    I would recommend losing the numbered scenes, that the job for the producer.
    I would also lose the parentheticals as well as they are not needed here. It’s a character driven piece so let the character who would be casted for these roles create their own characters and…[Read more]

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