Win A Date With Rachel Ciemone
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Win A Date With Rachel Ciemone

Dwight McNeary was not a confirmed bachelor. He just wasn’t looking for love. But, when his meddlesome sister enters him in a chance to win a date with Rachel Ciemone, the single father of two quickly finds himself infatuated with the sultry songstress.

Rachel Ciemone, voted one of the world’s most beautiful people, had everything at her fingertips. So, when Dwight McNeary refuses to go on a date with her, she is forced to reevaluate her life.

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      January 31, 2016, 10:29 pm
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      This isn’t a log line. It’s more like a synopsis or a pitch.

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    2. toojazzy says
      December 22, 2014, 7:32 am
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      Condense to 1-2 lines. Bottom line is a famous beauty queen or singer is matched with an average Joe who opts not go to out with her. Alot of information crammed in here….thin it out a bit and you have a good story.

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    3. bajasarah says
      October 9, 2014, 5:51 pm
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      I like it but to long?

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    4. Dem-Nisbet says
      September 17, 2014, 11:30 am
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      Brilliant idea, but the hookline is way too long, and unfocused. Very interesting and a good start.

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    5. September 17, 2014, 6:15 am
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      nice story overall, might be a little boring. too much information for a logline.

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