White Dawn
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White Dawn

Man returns from war and is recruited by a secret order. He must train his new powers and prepare for the threat about to arrive while managing his PTSD.

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    1. leroysm says
      January 26, 2016, 1:58 am
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      Not sure about the title. What does it mean? Has the same plot as many successful flicks, however. I guess it’s all in the character development.

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      Halling86 says
      January 19, 2016, 3:18 pm
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      What power? when did he get them? From where did he get them? Kind of vague. Potential in the story.

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    3. December 17, 2015, 1:43 am
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      The war goes on in the protagonist’s private life. Did I get right? Good luck to you.

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    4. Brian says
      November 26, 2015, 8:13 pm
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      Good start. The closest thing to a hook that I read is the issue of PTSD, which gives me hope that there’s potential in your idea. For now, though, your character and story direction are vague. To pull me in, try to relay more specific information.

      Thanks for sharing.

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