Wasteland
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Wasteland

A bodyguard has been falsely accused of murdering his own father and must survive, a now hostile, Earth.

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    1. Brian says
      November 26, 2015, 9:15 pm
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      Merging the elements of family and false murder seems like a new twist to me, but I could use more information to describe the bodyguard and the hostile Earth. Why is the Earth hostile? Why does this character have to be a bodyguard? How are these elements expected to heighten our engagement (because if they don’t, they’re insignificant to mention)?

      On a technical note, I don’t think you need either comma.

      Great start.

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