Vengeance
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Vengeance

Three very different men join together to exact their vengeance upon the women they feel have wronged them, with twists and turns when none turn out to be what they seem.

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  1. October 16, 2017, 9:00 pm

    Without something hinting to the genre I thought this was either a Comedy or Drama but not a horror. Maybe the combination of Title and logline help it become a thriller or drama.
    Also don’t give everything away, the logline is to hook them not summarize the story.

    Seems like it might be a challenge to get to know 6 characters in 90 minutes. If there is one or two key characters that bring everything together I would target developing their characters and put that in the revised logline.

    The current logline doesn’t help me feel like I am open to getting invested in someone (or two).

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    Niksa says
    October 25, 2016, 7:22 pm
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    Not bad.

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  3. pastortim says
    December 6, 2015, 6:08 am
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    The concept will be much promising if the protag is just one, not a group. Then the character development can be easily followed.

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    damiz78 says
    March 28, 2015, 11:34 pm
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    This being touted as a horror/thriller, I’d expect the logline to display this. Even a little hint. This sounds like it could be a family drama about three adopted brothers trying to find their real parents.

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  5. Vapit says
    September 7, 2014, 12:14 pm
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    Want to learn more about.

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  6. February 15, 2014, 9:11 pm
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    You shouldn’t have to try to influence the direction of the logline with clauses like “twist and turns” keep the logline about the story and nothing more…

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    astern says
    December 26, 2013, 5:55 pm
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    I am in agreement with the other commentators twists & turns is too vague. When a story unfolds the audience will feel the suspense hence making things appear different from what one expects. Try to be more specific say for example: Three unlikely men (a tech geek, bar tender & a lawyer) join together to execute revenge on the women they feel have wronged them but their quest becomes a who gets who.

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    vickyn says
    October 7, 2013, 11:18 pm
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    The log line definitely needs some work. How have the women wronged them? Using “twists and turns” is too vague to really understand what the core of the story is. Think about what the story is really about and figure out how you can really put that into one line with what the protagonist faces. But it definitely would benefit from something more specific.

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    BVG59 says
    September 20, 2013, 1:24 am
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    Very different? How? The word ” none ” is unclear. Does it mean “none of the men”, “none of the women”? Did you mean to say ” nothing is as it seems”? A bit more description about how hey wronged them perhaps? Cheated on them, lied to them, broke their hearts, something more specific.

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