Too little too late
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Too little too late

Four couples with no relations to each other gets a mystery letter for a spiritual retreat. Only time will reveal the truth behind their connections.

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    1. November 26, 2017, 5:39 am
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      Sounds good yet obviously a character-based story which means balance development of characters is crucial in this. As a story doesn’t sound too unique but that isn’t an issue necessarily.

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      November 7, 2017, 10:42 am
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      Good concept!

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      HarveyFran says
      November 3, 2017, 2:47 pm
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      Great idea!

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      NoahEragon says
      November 2, 2017, 2:32 am
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      Really loved it.

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    5. October 16, 2017, 5:08 pm
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      Interesting. Small grammatical change to keep the reader from being distracted. Wish there was a one or two addition to let me know if this was a drama, a horror, something spiritual that brings them together. That would help me definitively make a decision on whether I want to watch it.

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      Danyl123 says
      September 27, 2017, 5:20 am
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      good, but check your grammar! See below.

      Four couples with no relation to each other receive a mystery letter for a spiritual retreat. Only time will reveal the truth behind their connections.

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      mrb1707 says
      September 25, 2017, 3:53 pm
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      Like the concept

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      MsLee2017 says
      September 20, 2017, 4:50 pm
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      Great logline.

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      Tarekk1 says
      September 20, 2017, 10:55 am
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      really interesting.

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      September 19, 2017, 4:22 pm
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      Interesting !

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    11. Mary says
      September 11, 2017, 10:06 pm
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      Amazing !

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      August 30, 2017, 11:57 pm
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      This would definitely hook the audience! Would love to know how the couples are connected!

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    13. lilcece7 says
      August 30, 2017, 11:48 pm
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      Really good concept…

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