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TO KISS A KILLER

A woman is involved romantically with two men and suspects one may be a serial killer.

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  1. Profile photo of dicksuicide
    October 2, 2015, 7:01 pm
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    more like a cereal killer

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  2. July 15, 2015, 5:31 pm
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    It looks like a nice job. :) The logline is fresh. Good luck to you!

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  3. mikeyz says
    July 8, 2015, 3:40 pm
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    Decent little thriller with good dialogue and a nice twist-ending.
    Some formatting and grammatical issues so I would suggest a good solid proof-reading as you work towards a newer, more polished draft.
    And you will need to re-work this and here’s the main reason why I think so: The story is very simple with few characters and limited settings (in fact, most of this story takes place at Belinda’s residence.) Given this nature, I think this could make for a neat short film. The problem is that at 68 pages – it’s too long to be a short film and it’s too short to be considered a ‘feature-length’ script (and when I say this, I refer to typical ‘industry’ norms — 90 pages for a comedy and usually no longer than 110 for a drama.)

    So, as I see it anyhow, the solution is relatively clear here: Increase the overall page count by 20 or so pages. How you might ask? In my mind, all you have to do is better work the 3 main characters (Belinda, Jonas and Max) by creating a whole elaborate set of back stories for each — perhaps even linking the 3 in some clever way, violent or otherwise, that perhaps better justifies the whole love triangle premise. By doing this, you’re able to fully flesh out the characters in a manner that satisfies the audience particularly as it relates to that twist ending. I think this will give the story a better flow overall and will make for a much smoother pay-off at the end.

    Hope this helps and good luck going forward with this!

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