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Through Maria’s Eyes

Gizella, a poor young Jewish woman, takes on the identity of Maria, a Christian, to save her family and herself from Nazi persecution, with only hope and determination to pull her through.


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  1. Yopauly75 says
    January 8, 2013, 9:19 pm
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    I will have to agree with one of the other reviewers . . . this script doesn’t really bring anything new to table. There are so many stories about the holocaust out there, that if you’re going to write about it, you better be sure that it’s different. That’s not to say that this is a bad script, far from it. The writing is pretty good. At times the dialogue seems a bit stale and stock but it still works. I think it dragged a bit in the second half and it felt about five pages too long.

    The structure was a bit odd at times. I’m not sure why the writer felt the need to give every action in the narrative its own line. You should group three or four of them together so it will seem less like a list. Also, there is no need to put certain actions like, SHOUT, in all caps. Also, I’m not sure what was happening on page 86 but you need to fix it. Readers are not going to enjoy the split dialague you do. I understand why you’re doing it but there are better ways to get your present your scene.

    Good luck to you!

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    lanesworld says
    January 8, 2013, 5:39 pm
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    I have to admit, this wasn’t exactly my cup of tea. If I was a studio executive, I would probably pass on this because it’s not different enough from other Holocaust movies I have seen. I feel one reason for this is because the dialogue in the beginning is generic. The dialogue could do a much better job of making these characters more unique and more complex. I feel if I know them more intimately, I will be more invested in their plight. I like the script best when Maria has a task or obstacle to overcome, such as on pages 59. For most of the story, she reacts to her situation and tries to blend in. I wish she was more proactive and pushed the story forward. Some of the scenes felt truncated. I was at times expecting scenes to more forward and progress, but they simply ended and the story then went in a different direction. I would recommend fewer scenes in the last half, as well as a clarity pass.

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  3. November 30, 2012, 12:43 pm
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    Can’t wait to see this made into a movie – very moving story

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  4. Al_Brown says
    November 28, 2012, 2:58 am

    If David Rich is involved, it’s the certain winner!
    Whoever finished second must still be on the track running.

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  5. November 27, 2012, 10:42 pm
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    I would also love to see this movie made! I hope it wins!

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    November 27, 2012, 10:34 pm

    eh.

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    abctvads says
    November 27, 2012, 8:43 pm
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    I would love to see this movie made and the story told!

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  8. November 27, 2012, 8:26 pm

    Through Maria’s Eyes

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    November 27, 2012, 7:13 pm
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    An amazing story of courage and strength.

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