The Shyster
An orphan is taken in by a gang of Northeast Philadelphia criminals and grows up to lead them in a turf war with the Russian ...
The Young Willow
A Real Young Thirteen Year Old Girl Spends Her Lifetime Raising Twin Girls Instead Of Pursuing Her Lifetime As A Graduate.The Man She Was Foolishly In Love With Was Married And Got Her Pregnant He Left Her And Her Twins To Be With His Wife And Two Kids, Instead The Man’s Wife Leaves Him And Goes To California With Her Sister And The Man Was Heart Broken. Later In Life Time They Were Divorced And He Married Willow. The Man Started Using Illegal Drugs And Heavily Drinking, And Later On He Started Beating On Willow….For Four Years….After That She Left Him With The Twins And Her Two Other Children And Pursued Her Dreams By Going Back To College And Starting Starring In Movies…Five Years After That They Were Divorced And He Died From Brain Damage. Sad Sad Story!!
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Couldn’t find a logline.
Okay, you are dragging down this site by posting this garbage and then creating fake accounts to rate it high. But to make those accounts appear legit, you post additional bogus loglines like this one. And so on, ad-infinitum. What’s worse, you then rate legit loglines poorly. Really pathetic. Thanks for ruining it for everyone else.
Admin – I hope you have the sense to see through this and delete these bogus account/s.
They are: ladiipooh, heyimlauren, romansrevenge, speelsrevenge, and I’m sure lots more.
lots of rich material to mine.
pick one story and tell it.
writing is rewriting, and rewriting is editing, cut, cut, cut!
Trololo.
There’s unfortunately no logline here but I think it’s possibly based on a true story so I’ll average the potential.
I like the graphic, but I think I’ll pass on other comments.
Pass.
let me start off by saying wheres the logline a lot of potential but no log sweetie.. i understand that you’re only thirteen but c’mon focus on the logline! but instead of grading you bad ima give you the good reward from miss.london!
where is the logline?
Sounds like one of the five premises for a million Lifetime movies. I wish I could wrap my brain around someone who thinks it’s normal to capitalize the first letter of every word in their sentence.
Anyway, not a logline at all.
i was astounded by this story and i was like woah! i write stories my self andi was like i nerver watch a movie about young teenn pregnant at 13 but your potential was too long delete some of it dont get me wrong i love it!
I had to laugh. I realise by doing so, I was inadvertently/advertently taking this serious/pseudo-serious logline too seriously or not seriously enough. Whatever, if it makes me laugh then it must either be funny or not funny. Either way I can’t be sure whether I got the point or missed it entirely…and I like that.
Excellant!
First, learn to spell. Second, delete your fake account.
Wow, that was longer than War and Peace! Holy shyster!! I don’t need to read the script. This is a synopsis! It actually started out interesting, then the novel began! My eyes are tired. Shorten it and make it good friend.
Stop creating fake accounts and giving yourself perfect scores. People like you ruin good sites.
nice potential! and its good!
fake account
Nice concept but logline is too long. You need to make it shorter.
I checked out the people grading this logline and two of the accounts were created within the last half hour and the only activity has been to grade this logline as perfect. That’s pretty sad.
I THINK YUU DID GOOD JUST TOO MUCH EXPLAINING!! BUT IT SEEMS GOOD.
good story!
good story!1 good point!!1 and do your best you will succeed honey!!
this is a fake account
This is a synopsis not a logline. Read some of the other loglines and the comments and you’ll get the idea clearer. The story sounds interesting conceptually and I’d like to read the script when it’s finished. Good luck Darraneica.
Umm, I think you have got your signals crossed. You have a very lengthy and detailed synopsis. If you want to get feedback on a logline, you’ll have to provide one. A logline is a single sentence which describes your protagonist’s challenge and stakes. I’d recommend that you read an article about how to construct a logline , then resubmit it. Ladiipooh was very generous with her ratings. I think you’ll find that the more ratings you get, the more you’ll see very low scores which will affect your confidence.
Love It! It’s Going To Be Good!! I Wonder How It’s Gonna Turn Out!!
a fake account