The Prisoner
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The Prisoner

Three American physicians travel to Guatemala to investigate a deadly tropical disease and find themselves as pawns in a high-stakes political game. After being thrown into a brutal concentration camp, escape seems impossible until the strange disease becomes their unexpected ally in a dramatic, revenge-filled climax.

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  1. Profile photo of MAFEllsworth
    April 5, 2016, 11:11 am

    Sounds interesting to me, and if the other two critiques are right, I’d sure want to see it, especially if it has any real scientific/medical merit, and from this screenwriter, it should have.

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  2. tfarnath says
    December 4, 2013, 12:04 am
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    I really enjoyed this script. I had to read it twice to fully connect everything, but that probably says more about me than the author. I actually like how the two stories play off each other and think they’re a good A and B story.

    The characters had an originality to them that easily set them apart, and unlike the other review, I like the prank Beck plays in the beginning. It shows he’s a character, and characters have heart.

    Here are some things I think need improving.
    1. From the first mention of the drink I knew it was going to be a cure or something significant. Is there a way to do this without being so obvious about it?
    2. We never figured out why Ramon didn’t leave. Maybe we need to see a plan that he had drawn up that involved several people? Just a thought.
    3. Eva needs to be ecstatic that she’s not dead when she wakes up!
    4. I think there needs to be more damage done to the Hunter to believe he’s that unrecognizable. It seemed far-fetched that the other guards wouldn’t recognize him.
    5. Carlos. We don’t know this guy at all and he ends up being an important part of the ending.

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  3. Profile photo of David-Healey
    November 9, 2013, 10:20 pm
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    This is a very interesting script but it is at least two movies (the hidden prison is one, the disease is the second). If this were two scripts each story could be better developed, as one script with two complex stories neither is as fully developed as it could be and both get a bit confusing at times.

    While the concepts are not new, they are done in an interesting manner.

    Some of the scenes seem to be undeveloped and unnecessary — the sniper attack in the beginning seems to be lost in the mix. The scene with Beck at medical school does not really add to his character and he never expresses that same humor again so it is almost out of character.

    I would suggest picking one of the stories, focusing on it, and using the other story as a basis for another script.

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