The Port of San Pedro
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The Port of San Pedro

In 1952 San Pedro, a newly promoted and naive undercover detective sees his investigation of the city’s crimes derailed by his own crooked police captain, a devious Chinese dame, and countless other delinquents.

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      says
      January 31, 2016, 9:48 pm
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      ‘Other delinquents’ muddies the story. What is the Chinese dame up to; let alone, those delinquents?

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      November 20, 2015, 3:38 am
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      The story has promise but what is the main character seeking?

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    3. ebabe says
      November 1, 2015, 3:55 pm
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      2 stars as a gift.

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      MarsAlien says
      August 13, 2015, 5:35 am
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      I don’t understand what the detective’s part in this is. Are we going to watch him watching the corruption for 120 minutes? Honestly, the crooked captain and his angle sound way more interesting and compelling. The detective, on the other hand, seems to just stand there.

      And are the devious Chinese dame, the countless, and the other delinquents part of the protagonist’s goal? If they have nothing to do with the premise itself, then this detail is irrelevant.

      Also, does it HAVE to be 1952? I tried to find a reason but couldn’t. San Pedro is also irrelevant.

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      August 12, 2015, 6:18 pm

      … So what does he DO about it?

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      marrow says
      August 11, 2015, 10:33 am
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      Nice Idea

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