The Pass
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The Pass

Married couple Jason and Anna agree to give each other a “Pass”: one celebrity they are allowed to sleep with, guilt free, if they ever by chance meet them. Now that Anna has a chance to use her Pass with a hunky superstar, Jason will go to great lengths to stop her.

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  1. lilcece7 says
    September 25, 2016, 1:04 am
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    I feel bad for Jason…this has great potential…

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    April 29, 2015, 4:29 am
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    Ha-ha I like it!

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    MDaSilva99 says
    April 11, 2015, 1:35 am
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    Similar to Hall Pass, but could still be really funny.

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    January 21, 2015, 8:25 am
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    yeah I agree, more originality.

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    clafleur says
    October 4, 2014, 9:25 pm
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    Not too original but it has potential.

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  6. February 10, 2014, 4:19 pm
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    It has great potential, but the inclusion of the clause distracts the readers’ focus, try rewriting not as a clause but as a closed statement.

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  7. aweiss says
    June 27, 2013, 11:19 pm
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    Interesting premis, and I like the twist. Good light fantasy.

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  8. scripted says
    June 11, 2013, 8:51 am
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    Appears nice

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  9. April 15, 2013, 8:11 pm
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    Needs more originality..

    Ron

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  10. February 23, 2013, 7:24 pm
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    Same exact story as Hall Pass, needs more originality.

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  11. November 20, 2012, 11:19 am
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    The hook is a little weak, maybe you should state the conflict. Why doesn’t he want her to do it?

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  12. October 8, 2012, 2:55 pm
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    Sorry to have to inform you…but they have already done this. It’s called “Hall Pass”

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    September 14, 2012, 6:33 pm
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    Nearly the same as Hall pass. But it is workable.

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  14. s3gun says
    August 2, 2012, 5:55 pm
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    forgot to rate, sorry

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  15. s3gun says
    August 2, 2012, 5:54 pm

    looks good… Lose the names in the logline though

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  16. July 10, 2012, 11:45 am

    Needs some spice!! Jason has got to have a big plan or else it falls flat. Mention something interesting in his plan. Lot of potential here. :-)

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  17. says
    June 29, 2012, 11:52 pm
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    A light-hearted agreement between a husband and wife, to allow each a romantic pass with a celebrity of their choice, turns serious when ones has the opportunity and the other can’t handle it.

    This is what I came up with when I tried to streamline the concept into something shorter. The above is 34 words to your original 50ish.

    The concept is remarkably similar to the movie Hall Pass, though yours has a celebrity angle. Still, it’s a fun concept for couples to watch, together or apart.

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    tserlin says
    June 22, 2012, 8:55 pm
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    Very close to having a terrific logline. rethink the core essence to infuse life into it – and with less words. Nice job!

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    bradyrick says
    June 12, 2012, 6:19 am
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    Well…I do like the concept, but it would need something fresh. Maybe she has a chance to sleep with his (female) crush! Or make the crush someone like The Rock or someone very intimidating so he would have to really be ingenius. But it does have the potential for some funny stuff!

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    jusork says
    May 29, 2012, 6:08 pm
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    I think the “pass” idea is what makes it seem old. You might just need to change the title. But as long as you focus on the celebrity aspect, it could be good. Making it a celebrity I think actually raises the stakes because the jealously is basically doubled. Might be important to imply that the offer was intended as an throw-away gag idea in order to increase the unexpectedness of suddenly being able to use it.

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      tserlin says
      June 29, 2012, 5:47 pm

      I agree totally with this comment. If you can infuse this somehow – it will elevate the logline~

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  21. May 24, 2012, 10:33 pm
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    Could be very funny. I like the idea. I’d like to see a tease of what he does to stop her in the logline.”The How”

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  22. joyhorror says
    May 9, 2012, 11:42 pm
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    I like it but I think it’s been done before. I think I’ve seen movies like this.

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  23. wmemoli says
    March 31, 2012, 2:09 pm
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    I have heard this concept before. Why is this different?

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    joe13 says
    March 30, 2012, 2:44 am
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    Forgot to rate

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  25. cacsanders says
    March 30, 2012, 12:42 am
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    You were almost there, almost hooked, and you didn’t bring it. You have potential though. Could be a very big chick flick.

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    minervenus says
    March 29, 2012, 2:35 am
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    Intriguing idea but not sure of the potential since it’s been done before.

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  27. March 27, 2012, 5:28 pm
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    This sounds a lot like Hall Pass, though I like the celebrity idea.

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    joe13 says
    March 21, 2012, 1:44 am

    Great premise. Good story potential here. Although it’s not the most original idea, (ie Seinfeld), it hasn’t been done for a feature film. I’d see this!

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    kleedom says
    March 20, 2012, 11:49 pm
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    Too much like the movie “Hall Pass.”

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  30. daxalaska says
    March 20, 2012, 10:18 pm
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    I like it all. Poor Jason! I do see great potential for a comedy here but it needs some horsepower.. Maybe a hint to Jason’s strategy?

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