the new world order
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the new world order

The paradise on earth is used to make deadly assassins. Colin has to find the truth and stop them from starting a world war.

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      January 31, 2016, 10:16 pm
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      I don’t get a story from this.

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    2. Chidi says
      September 6, 2014, 9:11 pm
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      You’ve got valuable suggestions already, but I’ll like to add that “they” says nothing. Make the opposition/conflict more relatable.

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    3. September 2, 2014, 9:25 am
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      You might want to make the hero save something less than the world. Maybe he could save what he perceives as the world (His world, which might only extends as far as he has traveled)

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      August 29, 2014, 12:12 am
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      Could be cool. Kinda makes me think of The Island.

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    5. Zia_Marwat says
      August 25, 2014, 5:34 pm
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      nice one

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