The New Child
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The New Child

An archaeologist and his wife can’t have a child, when he discovers a 15,000 year-old skeleton and uses its DNA in a cloning experiment to have a child, which he and his wife raise as their own. But the child becomes increasingly wild.

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    toglu4 says
    February 27, 2017, 4:04 am
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    great idea. the child’s responses should be expained in more detail.

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  2. toojazzy says
    September 20, 2014, 10:35 am

    Solid concept, nice. Reword taking out fillers and the idea is unique…I would read it and prob pay $12 to see it in theaters. Would be interesting to see your icon/avatar be a pix of a kid with one half a sweet kid and the other a wild child.

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    says
    August 13, 2014, 4:40 pm
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    Cool idea. What does the wild child threaten? The scientist’s career? Mankind?

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  4. February 11, 2014, 1:31 am
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    Sounds like a great story…

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  5. scripted says
    December 14, 2013, 12:38 pm
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    You can go with this concept

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    astern says
    September 8, 2013, 6:22 pm
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    I agree with the previous commentary concerning re-wording the logline. Little Miss Sunshine was referenced, Love that movie but it’s a comedy. This sounds similar to The Secret Life of Timothy Green with a sci-fi twist. Write on & good luck!

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  7. paul says
    August 8, 2013, 8:22 am
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    Could be interesting but the logline needs serious attention. Rework the logline and you’ll have an attention grabber.

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    says
    March 31, 2013, 7:35 pm
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    “An archaeologist and his wife can’t have a child, when he discovers a 15,000 year-old skeleton and uses its DNA in a cloning experiment to have a child, which he and his wife raise as their own. But the child becomes increasingly wild.”

    The wording really trips me up. I would first start off by taking out: ” which they raise as their own” Thats pretty much a given and the way you add it after the first two lines just gets in the way. Its just begging to be put in paranthesis. Try and combine it into one sentence that flows. Maybe Something like:

    An archaeologist discovers a 15,000 year old skeleton and uses its dna in a cloning expirement in order to have a child with his barren wife, but once born, the child becomes increasingly wild.

    Concept kind of reminds me of honey we shrunk the kids for some reason. Anyways just my 2 cents.

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  9. pixelrgb says
    February 4, 2013, 12:33 pm
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    Will the child kill his parents? Could be a suspenseful thriller with a twist.

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  10. Doboro says
    January 9, 2013, 9:29 am
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    Interesting idea with strong story potential. The logline itself could be written better, tighter and limited to one line, yielding all and more needed information.

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    October 30, 2012, 2:30 am
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    The increasingly wild part throws me. Otherwise a solid logline with massive potential.

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    melroggins says
    October 27, 2012, 12:20 pm

    Spoof or dramatic? Clean this logline up. Would be interested in taking a read of the script if you have one?

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    October 6, 2012, 10:40 pm
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    The thing about the wild child from the past sounds cool, but what a pair of irresponsible parents, this does not sounds real. at all……what if the husband is the insane mind ,and without telling the wife, makes that crazy experiment , and she will be unaware almost to the end, when he confesses her the true… a nice twist, for her obviously.

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    says
    September 14, 2012, 6:30 pm
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    Ok hook but leaves the reader with questions. Whick is ok using this plot because it works in the realm of cloning.

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    malakas says
    September 6, 2012, 1:01 am
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    Pretty good. Concice and lean, yet gets the interesting parts across in a way that makes me want to see the movie. Good job.

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  16. says
    July 31, 2012, 7:18 am
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    Sounds entertaining and unexpected

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    says
    July 1, 2012, 4:32 pm
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    Great concept and I think this has great story potential, but it needs to be cleaned up a bit. The first sentence is a run on and the “increasing wild” is a bit vague. I think it can be reworded and tightened up a little.

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  18. July 1, 2012, 11:23 am
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    Concept is good. What “paulmailhot” said was perfect! Lot of potential. Shorter logline here would hit the spot.

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  19. joyhorror says
    June 21, 2012, 5:32 pm
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    Awesome concept.

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    tserlin says
    June 21, 2012, 4:19 pm
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    There is something very interesting in your concept that simply does not come through in the logline. Also a few logical issues may pose problems — as well as the notion of going back that far in human history and expecting the product to be polite and hospitable.

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  21. says
    May 24, 2012, 2:13 pm
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    An infertile archaeologist uses the DNA of a 15,000 year-old skeleton to clone a child – who becomes increasingly wild.

    “Increasingly wild” doesn’t really sell me on anything. It’s kinda bland. If you can punch up that particular theme with more emotion or impact, it would help a lot.

    Here’s the catch 22, you are a writer, and a good writer uses fewer words. A one sentence logline is the key.

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      tserlin says
      June 29, 2012, 6:11 pm

      Completely agree witht his comment. Decide on the most essential points you want to use that will SELL this idea to potential readers.

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    ckmoak says
    May 8, 2012, 2:33 pm
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    I like this a lot. Parents fighting to maintain control over–or at least connection to–children is interesting. Especially when you get into the idea of whether early mancould be ‘tamed’ or civilized, or anything like that. Definitely interested.

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    May 7, 2012, 5:49 pm

    ……………………………

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    May 7, 2012, 5:49 pm
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    I don;t know..

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  25. wmemoli says
    April 30, 2012, 9:42 am
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    I can see this but I see it as a comedy with a caveman looking child.

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    March 28, 2012, 6:22 pm
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    The making fo a great story but try to place your events in chronological orders, it will help your sentence structure and convey your story vision better…

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  27. March 27, 2012, 5:45 pm
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    Unlike Splice, this child appears like a real child reflecting her ancient roots, which provide the basis for her later greatness as a leader of her people.

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    joe13 says
    March 27, 2012, 4:00 am
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    Splice is too similar to this idea. Yeah, there’s story potential here, but the idea needs to be fresher.

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