The Meaning Of Success
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The Meaning Of Success

A man who thought all he wanted in life was to have money and success, is forced to reevaluate when he has a serious accident and, in his dream, when his wishes come true they’re not what he wanted after all.

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    November 14, 2013, 3:04 pm
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    I liked it but the dream sequences lost me at times.

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  2. aweiss says
    September 21, 2013, 1:26 am
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    I liked your characters, even as i think they need more detail, dialog is pretty good, the concept is interesting and compelling, the message of the film never can be said often enough, and I think overall this script has potential. Well written overall too.

    My one nit is structure and formatting. I know a lot of this is a dream sequence, but that’s also where the problem is. This screenplay doesn’t really have a three act structure, and even as it’s a dream, it still needs one. My suggestion would be to read Blake Snyder’s Save The Cat. It lays out how to structure a screenplay in plain english, it’s also funny and wise. it was the first how-to book i read on screenwriting, and it was money very well spent. Syd Field is good too, but he gets somewhat dry and techie, I’d try him after Save the Cat.

    Formatting goes along with structure, and for that I suggest Coverage Ink’s style guide, which is what I use to answer any type of formatting questions. I know other people have suggested books as well on formatting, I haven’t read them, but i’m sure they’re good too. Coverage Ink also has good, reasonable coverage service, I’ve used them any times, it’s always good to get a pro to look at it as well. I’m not a shill for them, it’s just that I have much respect and liking for them. http://www.coverageink.com.

    I wish you much luck and success with your script, I really would like to see this made someday.

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