The Knights Of Shame
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The Knights Of Shame

Tyler wakes up from an accident with no memory of his past life. His reluctant brother takes on the task of not only reintroducing him to world, but also protecting him from his past problems that won’t seem to go away.

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    BruceD says
    July 2, 2015, 1:26 am

    Not bad but could use some rewriting. Keep at it.

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    BruceD says
    July 2, 2015, 1:25 am
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    Not bad but must be first or second try at writing. Keep writing and you’ll improve. Cheers.

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  3. December 7, 2014, 10:41 pm
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    There isn’t much to go on here. You need a major over haul. Tell us the names of the characters. Make us care. Maybe his brother helping him in the world is the one who caused the memory loss?

    Keep trying.

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    ebfilms says
    November 17, 2013, 2:41 pm
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    Highly unoriginal garbage. My apologies of course, the homemade awful trailer with crappy lighting and shot in your Mom’s garage didn’t help any. May I suggest you stick to your day job. Give up writing. You either have it or you don’t have it. YOU WILL NEVER HAVE IT. Sayonara.

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