The Healing Tree
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The Healing Tree

A dying man trying to save his career is drawn into a search for a miracle drug that heals all illness that has been created by a country doctor.  He goes to the remote village in search of the secret of this cure, and when his life is saved, comes to learn the “cure” is the power of the leaves of the tree of life on which Christ was crucified in blood atonement for original sin.

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  1. October 15, 2016, 9:36 am
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    Sounds amazing. Don’t give up. This will be produced one day! Good. Very good. :)

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    Markgr says
    February 15, 2014, 3:12 am
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    The story seems to contain a few characters too many. While it is fun to spend time with most of these characters, the pure number of relevant characters also prevents us from identifying with any of them. Perhaps it would be better to focus on fewer characters and allow the writer the chance to flesh them out more fully, the characters to change and grow and the audience to feel the story.

    The Change of tone toward the end when we enter “gangster-land” seemed incongruous with the rest of the script. The script’s best moments are the endearing character driven moments between Hank and Roberta, or Patrick and his family members. Those are entertaining and fun, so the guns seem out of place at the end.

    You know your characters weel, and the final stretch of the script would have left a better Impression with me if it allowed for deep revelations of characters rather than settled for an action set-piece. It did not seem true to the spirit or the tone of the story.

    By the way, shouldn’t we find out what happened with Tom Jr? He played an important role too.

    A quick suggestion – the doctor’s 200 year-long life is dealt with quite matter-of-factly. Perhaps there is a Chance for a surprising reveal there, maybe we should think he is the grandson of his father in the beginning.

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    chrisliam says
    November 9, 2013, 1:06 pm
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    Very unique idea. I enjoyed the idea of the gap between provable scientific fact and faith. The first half of the screenplay works better for me than the latter. Patrick is a very interesting character. There are a significant number of characters that do not advance the story (see Maria) that would work better in a book (this was an adapted story) than in a screenplay.

    There were a few issues with this screenplay. The first was the formatting. I am assuming some of the scene description was taken directly from the book. For a screenplay it was overworked and off putting. The second was the relationship between Hank and Roberta. It seems quick and is in-congruent with the stakes that are at play for the rest of the script. The final thing is that the needed suspension of disbelief increases dramatically as the screenplay moves forward. Wonder drug: I’m in, from the crucifixion tree: I’ll go for it, guy soaks in a pool and is cured, you still have me, guy shot in the chest and walks it off, seems a little much, construction equipment can’t tear down fence…a little too far fetched.

    When all is said and done I liked the script a lot. I think the things I mentioned are fairly valid and as much a product of adaptation as they are creation. I think they are relatively quick fixes. Congratulations, nice job.

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