the cult a sack serial killer
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the cult a sack serial killer

its the fifth anniversary of the initial mass murders and still not even a trace of evidence has been discovered 9 houses and 9 family’s slain by one insane psychotic serial killer who is so smart the cops don’t no where to start the only thing they have to go on is the killer removes the nipples of all the victims he keeps them alive long enough two witness the removal and that will be the last thing they see there must be a reason why

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    1. Airigami says
      May 5, 2016, 12:23 am
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      That is the longest run-on sentence I ever saw. And the logline seems very VERY long. It is supposed to be around 1-2 grammatically correct sentences. Remember, this is a pitch to sell your story to the directors/producers. Think about only having five seconds to talk about your story, it could help out a bit to practice pitching your story to a friend.

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      damiz78 says
      January 17, 2016, 2:18 am
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      This can’t be serious.

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      Legend123 says
      October 6, 2015, 1:18 pm
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      Interesting

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