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Terrible Turk

In 1890’s, the time of ending eastern empires and conquering western civilization, New York was a strange culture and strange vision for the Ottoman wrestler who defeated all his rivals in Europe and the United States. Yusuf wrestles in shadow of virtue, beliefs and love. He struggles between cultures as his fame carries him to the top of the wrestling history.¬†Inspired by the true story of a man with superhuman strenght known by the world as The Terrible Turk.

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    July 11, 2012, 10:32 am
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    It is just too long, you lost me early on, the shorter the better, 25 words or less.

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    July 9, 2012, 10:40 am
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    I found this a bit tough to read. Grammar needs help and the story needs to be told more through the characters and less through the descriptive action. “Show, don’t tell.”

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    May 31, 2012, 7:22 pm
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    tonyr says
    May 17, 2012, 7:42 pm

    Nothing about this works. It’s badly written and impossible to follow. It needs to be reworked. It’s an interesting concept.

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  5. allymay says
    May 16, 2012, 2:32 pm
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    The action paragraphs are exceedingly long, yet, not descriptive and visual. The writing is choppy and difficult to read. There is a lot of telling, rather than showing. It was difficult to hod my interest.

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