Steve Barlow Gets A Life Coach
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Steve Barlow Gets A Life Coach

Loser hires bargain basement life coach off Craigslist but finds out you truly get what you pay for when the mentor ends up needing more help than the student who hired him.

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    rvgoya says
    May 4, 2016, 5:18 pm
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    I like this concept…now I need to know more about the plot…a little detail about the life coach wouldn’t hurt.

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    Pasquali says
    July 15, 2015, 5:39 pm
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    I like this one a lot. Finding a life coach on craigslist is a very funny idea. Well done.

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    leeoconnor says
    September 19, 2014, 11:58 am
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    This could be improved. But I can see this being a comedy.

    Perhaps –

    A student hires a life coach but soon finds the mentor needs more help than the student.

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  4. September 3, 2014, 11:15 am
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    This is the best Logline I’ve read here so far. Sounds familiar (like it’s been done before), but sounds funny

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  5. March 11, 2014, 1:45 am
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    I like the premise. It sounds funny.

    I’d like a little more precision in the characters, though, and you could gain a little room to maneuver if you simply said:

    “A loser hires a bargain basement life coach but gets what he pays for when the mentor is the one who needs help.”

    Cut down, you can hang a little more detail on the structure and set up where the loser and mentor are coming from, especially if it’s a funny or telling detail that lets us know exactly the sort of trouble they’re in.

    Hope that’s some food for thought!

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  6. November 30, 2013, 5:59 pm
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    So funny. would like to give it a read.

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  7. belw says
    November 13, 2013, 7:04 pm
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    I know about 7 actors would love to be a problematic mentor.

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    rewrite says
    September 15, 2013, 11:56 am
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    Your logline is okay but the title can also be condense to get the audience, as just the…. life coach or you can say…. Get a life coach

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    September 12, 2013, 7:53 pm
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    Fun concept. It’s got some real potential. It would be nice to see something more substantial about the story, like what kind of situations do they get into? Why did he hire the life coach? To get a job? A girl? that might add more punch.

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    astern says
    September 2, 2013, 12:47 am
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    This sounds like a firecracker in the making. Maybe the life coach is a recovering alcoholic? Maybe he’s awkward with the opposite sex, late for every appointment, asks his client to borrow money. Their is a lesson to be learned in this: ” If you want something done right, you have to do it yourself.” Best Wishes!

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  11. scripted says
    July 1, 2013, 6:36 am
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    WHAT AN IRONY OF LIFE, WELL THIS IS INTERESTING

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  12. aweiss says
    June 30, 2013, 3:52 pm
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    I love stories where you “be careful what you wish for.” This sounds like it has a lot of potential. Would love to read more.

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      Jon-Cromer says
      July 1, 2013, 7:10 pm

      Andrea, thanks for the review. I’d love a little broad feedback (just overall impression) on the story if you’d like to read it. Just let me know & I’d be happy to send. :)

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