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Seven Years After

A terrorist attack on a city, built to protect the remnants of society from cannibalistic infected, separates a man and his young niece. With the help of three Marines he treks across a desolate wasteland to rescue her, unraveling the city’s darkest secrets along the way.

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    says
    March 24, 2015, 6:22 am

    Very well written story.

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  2. roknsrf says
    March 24, 2015, 3:37 am
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    First of all, congratulations on making the finals. I found your story to be an very exhilarating, scary, nerve racking thrill ride. Normally I cringe when I see frequent flashbacks or montages, but I thought you used them to perfection. I felt the characters where extremely well done, each leaving me felling like I wanted to get to know them better, but at the same, afraid too because they might be killed at any moment. The dialogue was crisp and clean with few words wasted. There were some proofreading opportunities, but less than most, and for the most part the grammar was good in my opinion. Perhaps you could reword some description and action lines so as to make them seen or heard, but I disagree with the idea that prose style writing can not work in a screenplay. V for Vendetta is a good example. as is the case with that monumental script, the trick is the slight nuisances in wording that trick the reader into seeing and hearing those things that normally cannot be. I also liked the way you set up the sequel with the ending. Overall, an excellent script worthy of the finals. Good luck

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    • warden67 says
      March 24, 2015, 6:00 am

      Wow, thank you. It’s currently undergoing a major rewrite with flashbacks taken out and events changed and shifted around, descriptions stripped down, etc. Really glad you enjoyed it. This is some great criticism. But how do you know I’m in the finals?

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    leeoconnor says
    February 16, 2015, 9:25 am

    Fast pace, good concept. A little issues with formatting here and there but nothing major.

    For example, don’t put ‘flashback’ in your slug use a super.

    I only read the first few pages but it was well written.

    Thanks

    Lee O’Connor

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  4. meberinger says
    January 14, 2015, 11:28 pm
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    A great script, though I had one major problem.

    You write in a very prose-like style, with lots of description and details. It’s great for a novel, or if you’re just reading the script, but directors might shy away from your screenplay because it seems like you’ve done all the work for them. They want to be able to imagine their own costumes and movements and even some characterization. A certain amount of ambiguity will get you more attention. I wasn’t sure where to deduct for that, so I took it from grammar? You’ve got some good stuff here, keep working!

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