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Sardis the Merciful

An isolated king finds redemption in his struggle with a sadistic prince.

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    Hydrofilm says
    December 5, 2014, 8:34 am
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    This has all the bearings of a modern day action flick and reads as such. It kind of reminded me of an 80’s blood and thunder movie. Whilst the action is exciting, the descriptions did seem at times to be quite modern in treatment as did the speech used in a few places, especially near the beginning.

    This would make a slick bombastic film.

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    chenopis says
    November 26, 2014, 3:43 am
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    The pacing is good, and the descriptions are vibrant, crisp, and concise. The characters are well differentiated and the dialogue good, although a couple of Valerius’ lines at the beginning seem slightly too modern.

    The turn at the end, when Sardis’s regains the upper-hand over Volmana, seems too abrupt. Also, I don’t get the sense that Sardis has really grown or changed over the course of the story.

    Overall, nice work.

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