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When coming face-to-face with the unknown serial killer he has been pursuing for months, Detective Devaroe must make the decision of his life, kill or be killed. Can he do it if the killer is the love of his life?

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    1. toojazzy says
      August 2, 2017, 6:16 pm
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      This is a classic story of a detective falling for a criminal. Add something unique to the story that sets it apart. You read stories in the paper all the time, police was arrested for relationship with inmate or improper relationship with …etc

      Potential added element: the woman is his long lost daughter from a hook up in high school. a The time traveler, a ghost, or the person is switchers from a woman to a man and slips into the crowd.

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      Gue-Nude says
      August 1, 2017, 9:38 pm

      Great on that

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      Willington says
      August 1, 2017, 4:01 pm
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      This is a very classic concept. Its potential depends on how the story is told and how well the characters are developed.

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      bbtatum says
      July 24, 2017, 2:41 pm
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      Great

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      July 11, 2017, 4:37 am
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      Great~!

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    6. July 2, 2017, 1:29 pm
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      I love this premise. I always think that the ingenuity of screenwriting and movie making has reached a brick wall kind of sameness, then someone splashes a cool dose of freshness on the scene. Hope you can get it produced; feature, indie. Doesn’t matter in the new digital age, as long as it gets produced. Good luck to you.

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      June 28, 2017, 8:05 pm
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      I like the suspense

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    8. Echaka95 says
      June 5, 2017, 6:39 pm
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      wow… interesting movie idea very creative!!!!

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    9. Coolkareem says
      June 4, 2017, 3:28 am
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      This is a very interesting Movie idea. However, I think pronoun is the most appropriate to be used for logline instead of names, use pronoun. And the last line ended with a question mark, which I also think it’s improper. You’re not interviewing your readers, just tell them what you have for them and let them decide.

      Good luck.

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      May 28, 2017, 5:17 am
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      This really knocked my socks off. Keep up the good work!!!

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      Jesusglira says
      May 17, 2017, 5:48 pm
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      Has potential.

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      ab297 says
      May 5, 2017, 2:13 am
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      Great potential.

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      March 14, 2017, 2:55 pm
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      pretty good idea, like the concept

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    14. March 8, 2017, 1:15 pm
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      This is good, snappy marketing copy. Usually I leave out proper names and opt instead for a description of the protagonist though.

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    15. March 8, 2017, 2:25 am
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      Very good twist having the killer be the love of the character’s life

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    16. March 5, 2017, 12:09 am
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      Would probably lose the word unknown. If it is an unknown serial killer, then how does he know that he is facing that decision. Great story concept though, and I look forward to hearing more about it.

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      Gue-Nude says
      January 13, 2017, 9:40 pm
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      nice

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      geeart1 says
      December 21, 2016, 9:27 pm
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      Hooked!

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      Xaleber says
      December 10, 2016, 9:18 am
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      Amazing! With the right direction and cast, this may turn out to be a classic neo-noir film.

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      donell00 says
      November 17, 2016, 5:49 pm
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      I love movies like this, so I’m hooked.

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      November 16, 2016, 11:54 pm

      I am really intrigued by this idea and would love to know the entire story.

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      leontl1 says
      November 16, 2016, 6:50 pm

      Obviously I meant ‘Moe’ “I’d love to hear Moe”

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      leontl1 says
      November 16, 2016, 6:45 pm
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      Great potential, would love to hear ore.

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    24. Joker2008 says
      November 13, 2016, 3:40 pm
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      Value and has potential to make great crime thriller movie

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      November 13, 2016, 3:23 pm
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      This sounds so interesting. Totally hooked on this story!

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      November 12, 2016, 2:00 am
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      Excellent hook! Are you in the middle of writing it or just beginning? I hope so because I’d love to read this.

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    27. November 6, 2016, 6:11 pm
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      Very important thriller with a suspenseful twist.

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