Poe
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Poe

The story is about Reincarnation. It progresses in three different time periods; future, present and past. The same characters but with different personalities or in positions, come and go in each part.  A Girl named POE survives three different apocalypses brought by humans’ sin. She is betrayed by her friends or lost her dearest person on the verge of life. Even though she despairs of and questions about living, she is always reborn in another life and through tragedies she finds the value of living in this world.

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  1. April 4, 2013, 8:41 pm
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    First thing first. 141 pages?! Have to admit, I thought this was going to be a drag to get through, but it actually read pretty decent.

    Nonetheless, this script can easily be shortened, by 20-40 pages.

    The heart of the story is in JJ’s hands, in my opinion. He is complex, yet comes across as selfish, sympathetic, etc. He even brings the best out of Poe.

    Consider making him the main character, with Poe being a great support character and a more focused story line with her assisting him in trying to help his inner demons as well as surviving the war. Through it all, of course he would help her with her issues and so on, as they take on the bad guys and the negative people on their side trying to break them down.

    Just a suggestion, off the top of my head.

    Any who, besides the poor grammar, and some formatting issues, I see promise in the story line as long as you’re willing to cut the bad, take the good and expand on it.

    Ron

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