Past and present
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Past and present

When a ordinary girl meets a famous moviestar, sparks fly immediatly, but not the good kind.
Both of them are fighting with their inner demons and the past they have left behind.

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    1. Profile photo of WilderCarnes
      May 28, 2015, 12:44 am
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      Though you probably have much more interesting elements going on within the script, the logline should show that as well. Don’t be afraid to be a little more specific.

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      • Anni_Pea says
        June 7, 2015, 12:24 pm

        Thank you for youre insite to my work, will fix this soon.

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    2. Profile photo of RutgerOosterhoff
      May 26, 2015, 6:31 am
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      Although a hook isn’t really necessary in a Romantic [Comedy?] , it would be nice to have one. Of cause, him living in a totally different world is food for disaster. ] And disaser/conflict spell humor. My two cents:

      “When an ordinary girl and a famous moviestar fall in love, they must fight their inner demons in order to build a meaningful relationship”

      Only problem: this is a much used concept, so your story should be damn good!!”

      Don’t make an other “Notting Hill”.

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      • Anni_Pea says
        May 27, 2015, 12:53 am

        Thank you for you’re insite! Appriciate the comment! The story in my mind is with a much deeper meaning.

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