Paradise City
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Paradise City

A Dystopian Society centered only on famous classic songs of the 70s-90s; the ruler is a Killer Queen, September is the only month 12 times in a row, and It’s Not Unusual to see a Piano Man or two. In this world lives Jack, a boy who only listens to metal and everything that’s not popular in Paradise City. Does he change the social norm? Or does he adhere to it in the end?

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      says
      August 21, 2017, 10:36 am
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      Interesting story but the logline itself is not well written. I agree with not using question marks at the end of one.

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    2. Coolkareem says
      June 4, 2017, 4:15 am
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      Good story with great complicated conflict. But the Logline is too long, it also ended with a question mark, which I think this is improper. Shorten your logline and tell your readers everything you want them to know about your movie, don’t try to tease them. Keeping them in suspense will not make any impact.

      Good luck

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      June 2, 2017, 10:08 am
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      I think the idea has great potential but the hook need improvement, its too long. Interesting story though

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