Miami To Atlanta
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Rating: 2.3/5 (2 votes cast)

Miami To Atlanta

Along with his two goofball friends, a depressed man takes a weird road trip in a borrowed car to make amends to his ex-girlfriend, but second guesses his intentions by the end.

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  1. April 2, 2013, 3:00 am
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    This was a fast read as it should be for a road trip comedy.

    For it to stand out from the rest of the other ones, I feel that more humor is needed through action and a more believable story line, mainly between James and Angelle.

    I would consider adding a few more scenes in which James and Angelle form a more meaningful relationship on some basis. Doesn’t have to be extremely deep, but needs to have some significance, otherwise it comes across as being forced.

    Anyhow, the script wasn’t so bad and it definitely has its goods about it!

    Ron

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    March 17, 2013, 6:36 pm
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    In my opinion, “Miami To Atlanta” is a road/bro-manse movie that would be inexpensive to make. I’m not the target audience for this author’s screenplay, and while there may be a good story inside this script, it will take work to bring it out. The dialogue doesn’t seem authentic and the character’s voices sound very similar. A solid rewrite is in order.

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