Mass Exodus
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Mass Exodus

Imagine God’s own money laundering scheme. A defiant group of Jews and Catholic priests smuggle thousands of Jewish refugees during World War II through daring escapes and an impressive network of bribery, forgery, and manipulation.

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  1. Flesh says
    December 26, 2015, 3:16 am
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    Powerful and concurrent theme of staying alive under Grace or Honor.
    2012 by Roland Emmerich is a decent spec script to check out for formatting and plot, theme.
    Keep writing and build the story as you want to see it with the audience.
    Good luck!

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  2. December 3, 2014, 4:24 am
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    Excellent!

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  3. December 3, 2014, 4:24 am

    Exellent

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    bradyrick says
    August 5, 2013, 7:07 pm
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    There were a few spots I thought could have run better. The length I thought also was a bit long. There are ways to compact the script, tell the same story, without as many words. Story is good, but sometimes a bit confusing.

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  5. ssabatino says
    July 23, 2013, 7:25 pm
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    see comments.

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  6. ssabatino says
    July 23, 2013, 7:23 pm

    Your story is obviously an historical fiction. One problem is you place the history in front of the fiction. Tell the history through the characters’ situations, rather than placing characters in a ready-made setting. When you do it that way, you risk character development – which has happened here. You have far too many characters. They weigh down the action, as well as take away from precious screen time for your main characters to express themselves – which they don’t. Another problem is, because of sparse dialogue, your story is reliant upon visual action. In that you do not deliver. I got to page 35, and I was still waiting for something to occur. I suggest you start the story at the point where characters are trying to get out of town. You can always flashback to answer key questions. You might also try finding a fresh angle on the smuggling-during-war genre. I felt I was trudging through from page one.

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  7. hingylingy says
    July 21, 2013, 3:46 pm

    Ya don’t say….I would advise you to save your critique of your own script for until after some others have reviewed your work…

    Hey! Great Job!

    Your in first place…with all the hard work and real reviews….

    Bravo!

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  8. stundra says
    July 20, 2013, 5:41 pm
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    A compelling period piece with lots of action and drama.

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