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nice don’t mess it up
Cool stuff here.
Good idea. sounds like a good read, would like to see more.
Log line works well.
In these times people would love to live through these characters
Love the idea. Needs a good script.
The premise is populist in nature and topical, and for those reasons it will resonate to a point. I like how lean it is though. Although I’m not crazy about the concept, I could see this being made and I think you summarized it very well and concicely, which is the point of a logline.
EXCELLENT!!!
Have the chicks surf and then you have Thelma and Louise meets Point Break. Need I say more?! Great hook, commercial, easy and clean logline. This is a winner, right here. Everyone who wants to enter a logline should take a look at yours. I’m already rooting for these chicks. Stay away from the obvious comedy pull that some are suggesting. This could be dramatically potent. Exciting. WP
I like the premise but feel like I need to know more before I would watch it.
Reminds me of the first scene in “Michael” then I look for a little more.
Solid work. Contemporary premise — people will want to see this. If there was a little bit about how or what they do, it might elevate the logline – but I think you did a great job!
This seems like it would be more of a comedy… kind of like Tower Heist which I loved so I’m VERY interested in this.
Well written. I would love to see this. The logline is not only timely, but it speaks to many people across this nation. Well done Peter. Now write the script and let us have a read here on ScreenplayFest.
I think the logline is well constructed. It doesn’t really matter if their actions are justifiable, as others have suggested, it only matters if they feel they’ve been wronged and want vengeance. We have to remember that every protagonists is not completely good and every antagonist is not completely evil.
It’s a heist movie, a mother daughter bonnie Clyde, maybe. I don’t know if the screenplay can deliver something different than what we’ve seen countless times, but it’s a topical setup.
It really needs a hook and I’m not feeling one.
I like the idea and the timeliness of it.
Forecloser is very real in today’s failed economy and a lot of people can relate to this storyline. I really like that it’s a mother and daughter team too.
Nice idea, but as Scott says, I’d prefer not to know the ending yet. More details please! I’d like to see this in real life
Definetly timely. It’s interesting that there’s a sci fi element to it with your genre.
Although you might want to say attempt to pull off rather then pull off. Otherwise the reader/audience already knows the ending.
Set It Off…. first thing that comes to mind. Could work. Its different.
Uhm, people who don’t pay the bank get foreclosed, its not the banks fault, a well thought out film but its too simple
I like the idea of the film — getting back at the bank that foreclosed on their home, but I also would like to know more about what kind of heist, how much, and what they do with it to escape from getting caught.
Sounds interesting and fun — semi Thelma and Louise. I’d like to hear one more sentence — so they pull off the heist of the century (that in itself is vague) on this bank that foreclosed on their home (cool), and then what?? By doing what?? What kind of heist?? To gain what else besides revenge? A chance to live in on an exotic island? What else?