living with mum
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living with mum

A young mum raising her three children while living with bi-polar. the children grow up watching their mums highs and lows. her being sectioned to being aggressive to being their angel. this woman refuses to accept she has bi-polar and because of that her children suffer.

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    1. Dartistman says
      January 21, 2016, 7:02 pm
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      will go no where. you need to research people with these condition.The logline sounds bias and prejudicial. I have a few friends with bi-polar and who have children it may never come to that point. The side point it sound like a bad documentary fictionalized other than a fictionalized story.

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    2. ebabe says
      November 1, 2015, 4:12 pm
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      Bad grammar. Bad sentence structure. Needs a complete re-write.

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      marrow says
      August 11, 2015, 10:59 am
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      Good potential

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      SusieK says
      June 29, 2015, 3:16 am
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      Little bit logline improvement will catch the readers mind…

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    5. LoriMeyer says
      June 28, 2015, 9:25 am
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      This is not a logline. It’s way too long. Reads more like your synopsis. I think you have a good idea here, you just need to encapsulate it into a few words. Good Luck!

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    6. March 26, 2015, 9:04 am

      Ok how would you do this? I am new to this
      thanks
      pearl

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      March 25, 2015, 5:27 pm
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      Hello Pearl,

      Your story has potential but there’s no logline yet. I’m looking at a very short synopsis now.

      Answer a few questions:

      “What are the children going to do now, and how does this change their relation with their mum? = character grows. What are the stakes? The children not becoming like their mum in later live? The mother overcoming her problems and giving the family a chance to become functional? Put the basic and your info in one logline, not longer tahn 35 words; this forces you to figure out what story you really want to tell.

      Hope this helps,

      Rutger

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