LEVELHEAD
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LEVELHEAD

A realist superhero saves face and not much else.

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    1. Profile photo of Abdelouahab
      September 21, 2016, 8:03 am
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      “saves face” must be the stake so you can have a story with protagonist, antagonist and conflict.

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      mlnga says
      July 18, 2016, 4:08 pm
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      I think you need to add to this, but the premise is interesting.

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      vp81955 says
      April 22, 2016, 2:10 pm
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      Levelheadedness is nice, but this needs to be spiced with some idealism. Otherwise, there’s no superheroism about him. Elaborate on his powers and history, please.

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    4. JCMercer says
      September 1, 2015, 10:02 pm
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      Rutger — You nailed it:) Noah, keep writing. Google everything:) It made me think, “Hancock”.

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      Pasquali says
      July 15, 2015, 5:11 pm
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      This is too brief. Need to know more about the story, protagonist, and hook.

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      jfs15 says
      June 26, 2015, 1:53 pm
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      Hard to tell much of anything from that logline, but I like the title!

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    7. bajasarah says
      June 6, 2015, 4:16 pm
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      I like it.

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      May 20, 2015, 4:36 am

      Ok Noah, I like your title! I also like the ‘feel’ of your logline, but it is not really a logline yet. Now your logline(s)/superhero is a walking ‘Contradictio in terminis’. A superhero’s first priority is to help other people AT ALL COSTS, without being egoistic. You could say heroes are stupid people because they are willing to risk everything often for no result at all. This being said all at ones your logline (what really is nothing more than a description right now) makes sense again. It’s confusing!

      So you want to create an anti-superhero. This has been done but you are doing it differently, so no problem. “Give me the same thing only different!” Now you have a superhero who is doing it for all the wrong reasons until he/she meets….

      Another interesting point is that all protagonists start their journey whit wanting to create a better life for themselves (egocentric) and then when the story progresses get involved with other people and feel that they have to help them to. This fact also is in favor of your logline.

      Maybe your screenplay could already work but you don’t really know how to right the logline or don’t want to give away too much…?

      But to make a better logline you have to give a bit more info…

      A well written logline needs: a tormented protag, a mean antag, a compelling journey, stakes, possible thresholds, irony, a compelling mental picture, a killer title, and a clear audience* and low costs.*

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