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Killer Be Killed

A Band of nomadic serial killers descend upon a remote, uncharted town. There, they encounter a pair of reclusive military heroes, who were thought to have perished years ago; and they intend to keep it that way.

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    January 29, 2015, 8:06 pm

    The script felt rushed after they reached the cabin, and there was a sense of just trying to finish it, which I can appreciate, but I feel a few revisions might help to catch a lot of errors, such as using the wrong character names. Jeffrey’s adulation of Shane and Glory was my favorite aspect of the script, though the serial killer family dynamic didn’t really work for me.

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  2. January 6, 2015, 1:03 pm
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    good news:
    This is a wild and interesting concept that should totally be explored. There are 3 great female characters, and one is a villain that’s truly evil. There are some great comedic one-liners that come from the right characters and at the right moments.

    not-so-good-news:
    I wasn’t sure who’s story this was (1 of those 3 women) and if it’s an ensemble story there seems to be 2 different groups with 2 interesting backstories that they could be separate screenplays. These 2 worlds collide and that’s fine, but the story needs to be restructured to tell it cinematically. There’s a lot of flashbacks and a lot of exposition. While not a big deal but added to confusion, missing from the slug-lines were the timing of the scene (same time, continuous, moments later, etc.). It would help the read if those were included. Dialogue needs to be slimmed down. Grammar (not just spelling and punctuation but edits,etc.), while spelling and punctuation is fine, the screenplay needs to be gone over word-for-word because there are words repeated or undeleted when changed or simply missing (as I’ll do in this review) and more. Those errors make it a jarring read.

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