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Jesus and Johnny

A suicidal gay man on a mission is derailed after his wallet is stolen by a pickpocket with a supernatural touch. When their paths cross again, it will change the lives of men, women, and two very different kinds of angels.

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    jjcj3113 says
    July 27, 2012, 10:14 pm
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    I don’t think you captured a realistic depiction of the gay “Lifestyle” if that is what you were trying to do.

    The dialogue was not very good and all the characters were depicted as rough trade. When your character Johnny tells his sexual partners that he may have infected them it just wasn’t realistic. Their reactions didn’t work either.

    When someone finds out that they have HIV, they go through much more of a struggle than getting drunk and running and telling all their exs. I know this from personal experience.

    If you want to write a drama about someone with HIV, then you should dig deeper into the characters emotional truth. Sorry I couldn’t be more positive.

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    bmuresanu says
    May 29, 2012, 9:29 am
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    sorry.

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    May 24, 2012, 7:14 am
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    As a new writer myself, it is hard to critique someone else’s work. I will share some of what I do know (and I am just one reader).

    Alot of what I have learned in writing a screenplay is that descriptions of scenes and actions should only be what is necessary for the story. Most of what is written gives decriptions of the formentioned that should be left to the production company making the film. There is alot of description not relevant to the story unless one was writing a novel. (This is referred to as the density of the script).

    I felt the pacing of the action needed to be paced better, broken down to accurately display what is seen on the screen at a particular moment.

    The dialog at times was very lengthy for speech.

    I’m more of a Sci-fi kinda guy so perhaps I am not the ‘target audience’ for this movie. I felt that parts of the story was a little too obscene for me. There was quite abit of explicit profanity in the script. I’m not above using it in my scripts at all, just not dropping the F-bomb on almost every page.

    On a last note: I got some bad reviews on my first script for doing pretty much everything I mentioned here on thie review. When I thought about it and rewrote it, I thought my work came out better than before.

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