It Takes Two (to Tango)
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It Takes Two (to Tango)

You’re my kind of man, it’s tango. When a passionate tango dancer searches for a perfect dance partner, he encounters surprising twists and turns.

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  1. Profile photo of Tiana-Leigh
    July 2, 2013, 9:43 pm
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    I think this has potential. Some parts were good but some were lacking. The development of the characters and the dialogue need some work. I found the dialogue quite hard to read, it did not flow well all the time. But this does have potential. I say a re-write with some careful editing and a change in some of the dialogue and this could be a pretty good script.

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  2. ssabatino says
    May 27, 2013, 7:25 pm

    I could not get beyond page 9. Truth be told, I couldn’t get past the parenthetical in the title. Either take out “to Tango,” or use it. This is obviously a first attempt at screenwriting, so I will be merciful and give you advice. First of all, buy a used copy of The Screenwriter’s Bible. You will see how your formatting needs so much attention. Secondly, before entering another draft into any competition, can you please – oh, I don’t know – PROOF READ IT FIRST?!! What’s with the hand drawn arrow on page 5, or the hand written page numbers? And the innumerable typos! Such faux pas! Finally, figure out who this Mason character is. I’m not feeling “dentist,” although he’s leaning toward Steve Martin’s character in Little Shop of Horrors. (Would a dentist really say “ain’t?”) I get a sense of his being a cross between Michael Jackson and Tony the Tiger. By the way, is he Swedish? He often used the term “Ya.” Or perhaps he’s Amish; he often says “yea.” (Do you mean to use the word “yeah?”) Add a dictionary to your shopping list. Obviously, since I didn’t finish reading it, I won’t rate the script.

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