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In My Life 1985: Blue Day

It’s 1985. Sarge ‘The Lone Ranger’ a man living in the wrong era runs a close-knit team at S.W.A.T with his two hand picked protegees Harry ‘The Leader of The Pack’ and Jackson ‘Shaft’. When Harry is distracted from guarding the president by his wife having a steamy affair in the opposing hotel room, he tries everything to save his marriage and even considers quitting S.W.A.T. Meanwhile it seems someone has a vendetta against Sarge and after arresting the only suspect in a showdown at sunset the attacks continue. Who could it be? And what do they have against Sarge and his lucky horseshoe ring?

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  1. cyndith says
    July 22, 2012, 3:10 pm
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    There is good action that moves the story along nicely. You have strong characterization. I felt a little disappointed at the end. It is abrupt and perhaps it is effective, but it was difficult for me to understand how Harry and his wife got to that point.

    Good luck.

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    axelrodm1 says
    May 5, 2012, 7:04 pm
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    I like this better than 1965. Dialogue and characters are more realistic. Good work. I do agree with Olivia, the structure needs a little work.

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    oliviaross says
    April 18, 2012, 10:30 pm
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    I like the idea, but the structure could use a little work. Keep truckin’.

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    jetski says
    March 20, 2012, 6:39 pm
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    Good concept. Good luck.

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