Hurt (Part I)
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Hurt (Part I)

After finally standing up to his bully, Chris and his bully Jorge become good friends. But the more Chris hangs out with Jorge, the more trouble he gets into. Will Chris be able to realize that being friends with Jorge will have a negative effect on his life before it’s too late?

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    July 2, 2015, 10:13 am

    Where to start? I would first dowload Celtx and copy-paste your screenplay into this screenwriting program. While working with Celtx you will learn the basics of format. One more thing, cut up your action action lines; your paragraphs are much to long and there are way too many unfilmables.

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    BruceD says
    July 2, 2015, 1:34 am
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    Nice characters and situations. I enjoyed reading this.

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    ebfilms says
    December 12, 2013, 12:15 am
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    Just didn’t connect with me. Not very good. Too long, too drawn out

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    TheElite09 says
    November 1, 2013, 12:46 pm

    The script is still in the rough draft stages, so I apologize for the amateur like format and writing. As always give me your brutal honesty with helpful feedback. I would also like to know how you felt about Jorge and Chris. Thanks for reading and hopefully you’ll enjoy my screenplay.

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