Home Paw Christmas
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Home Paw Christmas

Three puppies work with Santa Claus to find their best friend a sick French bull dog named Cubby a home for Christmas.

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    1. July 10, 2017, 11:12 am
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      Dog stories are equal to baseball ones…heart string.

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      says
      January 21, 2015, 9:37 am
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      I’m a sucker for anything animal. Good idea!

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    3. SW63 says
      October 14, 2014, 11:28 am
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      Very cutsie – but no drama. I agree with Blue Parrot.

      Up the stakes – make this a “Must do this – or else!” type story. Somewhere out there is a little kid who’s lost his puppy… Times running out. Only Santa can magically stop time to bring the two together. Go Santa and his little puppy helpers!

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      October 9, 2014, 7:36 pm

      Thank you for great comments, every writer tries to inspire and motivate.

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    5. bajasarah says
      October 9, 2014, 6:39 pm
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      Yes, yes and yes

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    6. BlueParrot says
      October 4, 2014, 12:03 am

      Something like this might help solve a few issues others had….

      Early on Christmas morning, three little puppies ask Santa to help their sick bulldog friend find a home before their owner sends him to the pound.

      A little more drama and a better sense of time/ place :-)

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    7. toojazzy says
      September 20, 2014, 1:56 pm
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      nice, a keeper. Restructure line for punctuation and grammar….and you have warm and fuzzy

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      regello says
      September 13, 2014, 2:10 pm
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      There’s not a lot of info to go with here. How do three puppies manage to have contact with Santa? And is Santa the appropriate authority for resolving the situation of a homeless bull dog? It seems more an assignment for that lady who runs the shelter in “Pit Bulls and Parolees.”

      As for the grammar, this also seems a little off: “…Find their friend Cubby a sick French bull dog a home” should probably be stated, “find a home for a sick French bull dog named Cubby.” (And you don’t need to use his name in the logline.)

      Best of luck.

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      GBland77 says
      September 12, 2014, 12:54 pm
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      Cute story. Little ones should love this.

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      September 12, 2014, 8:22 am
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      I love it! this could be another Christmas classic.

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      LesaSmalls says
      September 11, 2014, 12:26 pm
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      Warm and fuzzy! Kids should love seeing this over the Christmas holiday.

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