Heist on the Final Frontier
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Heist on the Final Frontier

After Russis’s nuclear stockpile becomes too big to ignore the U.S. puts together an elite team of the best criminals from around the world to go and steal the launch codes. But there’s a catch: the base where the codes are being kept is in space.

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    1. Brian says
      November 26, 2015, 8:31 pm
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      Very good story premise. It certainly has potential. Reminds me of Armageddon and ConAir, both of which were mostly a blast to watch in the theater.

      I have two issues, however: you’re going to have to really justify putting together so many criminals for this mission. It doesn’t seem to make sense to risk putting so many violent egos together, and what would be in it for each of them? Why would they take on the mission and not flea? (Makes me think of The Rock, too, which is another great popcorn movie.)

      Secondly, your use of “there’s a catch” is off-putting, somewhat amateur. Save this cheekiness for the teaser. Perhaps find a way to incorporate the space element within the same sentence as the rest of the pitch.

      Still, well done.

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    2. September 7, 2015, 11:48 am
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      ‘But there’s a catch’ I would keep out of the Logline.

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    3. August 26, 2015, 11:57 pm
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      The last line did not provide as captivating a hook as the initial set up deserves.

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      August 20, 2015, 9:13 pm
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      Good :)

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