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Happy Puppet Boy

After 25 years of struggle against his medical condition, Roberto sees himself free of impairments, finally able to find his place in the world and carve a path of his own. Despite all setbacks, Roberto embraces life and launches himself in a quest for feelings and emotions as he explores his relationships, pursues happiness and tries to discover the true meaning of life, where a man’s greatness is the greatness of his dreams.

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    JDror says
    September 19, 2012, 12:17 am
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    Phew where to start? There are numerous formatting and grammatical errors that are extremely annoying. More importantly there is no compelling plot. The characters, such as they are, are one dimensional. Dialogue becomes more interesting when there are three or more people involved as the tension can shift unexpectedly. Two person dialogues only work when there is clear wit in the script and tenable chemistry between actors. The first condition is in the control of the writer, the second in the control of the actors.

    I don’t understand why the puppets played such a small role until the latter half of the script. I had expected much more when Roberto’s mother died. Speaking of which what was the point of the mother having such a tragic death?

    Read as many screenplays as you can so that you can develop a better sense of plot and character and other aspects of pacing. I can tell by your (Francisco’s) comments that you are passionate about this.

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    jjcj3113 says
    September 15, 2012, 8:56 pm
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    I thought this script lacked in many ways.  Many/most of the scenes had little to no conflict in them and there were just talking heads. There was a real lack of drama to this piece.

     There were many formatting errors in the script such as every time a characters name appeared it was in all caps.  You should only have your characters names in all caps the first time they are introduced.

    The love story was flat and very unreal.  The characters lacked depth.  

    There were a lot of unnecessary scenes that didn't really move the story forward.  When the writer transitioned between timeframes he or she tried to explain how to do it on film.  That doesn't not belong in a script and it takes the reader out of the story.

    The writing was very choppy and the grammar was very poor.  This may have been due to the writers lack of the English language, I got the impression this story was written by someone that English is not their native language.  That may account for the choppiness.

    i did not get the purpose of the theater scene in the middle of the script.  It was totally unnecessary, in my opinion.  It did nothing to move to story along.  

    what was the main character's want.  That was not clear.  

    This script was too long for what it was.  

     

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    Francisco says
    September 13, 2012, 1:31 pm
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    Great story about love and personal discovery. It’s full of subtext and important messages.
    There’s a great character arch and emotions are very well explored.
    Very easy script to read, it grabs you from page one. I love the feeling it leaves in the end.

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