Grimwood
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Grimwood

A medieval city is dying; prisoner to otherworldly beings known only as The Brood that lurk in the surrounding woods and it’s up to a mistreated orphan girl to discover the mystery of her origin, the limits of her superpowers, and ultimately to train to fight the beings and win the heart of the prince she loves.

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  1. Profile photo of BlueJayCentral
    October 23, 2016, 10:35 am
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    Its okay, but I feel like some things missing

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  2. roknsrf says
    March 16, 2015, 3:15 pm
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    By far and away the best screenplay in this contest bar none. WHY has only one person reviewed this script? It is AWESOME!!!! It does need a pro edit, formatting corrections, i.e. no double — in the sluglines and scene headings, etc. In addition, some of the action scenes could use a tiny tweak here and there so they fall under guidelines of what can be seen and heard only, but there is not much more the writer could do to have a script film ready. On the other hand, My advice would be, that when you take a more prose style approach to your writing, it is important to follow the rules of fictional prose that apply. Being very careful not to repeat descriptive adjectives is one. Take just for example, on the first page where you use the word “coal” twice to describe two different things. Or, the word “blackness” on the same page. Also, try to remove unneeded words and any unnecessary redundancies. Some scholars say to remove the word “that’ as many times as you can, or use words like “which” to replace it. And, try hard to use “that” sparingly if not at all within dialogue. Ultimately, my point is this script is so close to perfect in so many places that the whole thing must measure up to it’s own clearly set standard of excellence all the way through, from the first page to the last. A script this good deserves that kind of commitment from the writer. Imagine Tolkien’s work, every page as rich and fulfilling as the last all the way to the end. This screenplay can be every bit that good because you have already proven you can make it that good time and time again right here within the lines that are already pure gold. I suggest the writer read the script, “V for Vendetta” it is written in prose style and it is flawless. It can help you see how to make these small and subtle, yet extremely important, edits. On another note, I disagree with the other reviewer’s criticisms of the ending. I thought the Brood teeth were an excellent way to complete the 3rd Act comeback so there could be a triumphant victory in the end. All one has to do is look back at the classic ending of “War of the Worlds” when all seemed lost, but then a tiny thing like the Earth’s bacteria did the overwhelming foe in. Bottomline, this a Grade A genuine 5 stars script.

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    chrisliam says
    November 6, 2013, 2:59 pm
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    I really enjoyed this. Very unique. There are some surface issues (grammatical errors see page 2) and slight timeline issues (Ember is about a year old when found at the gate but after 16 years she is still 16). Easy fixes. The larger problem that I had, as a matter of taste is in the ending. The teeth being the “death blow” seems simple. In that capacity, the transformed brood seem MUCH easier to kill than their “weaker” form. Example: when shooting arrows at them in their weaker form the weaker form easily dodges but when in their stronger form they seem easily dispatched.

    All in all I really enjoyed this. I found the character relationships engaging, the climactic arch effective and the story, while fantasy, the suspension of disbelief was effective.

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