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interesting story…draws you in
Logline is good, definitely interesting. Story is compelling.
I thoroughly enjoy this log line. Well written and interesting.
Sounds interesting.
When the wife of a leader of a medieval village is murdered, he grabs a blade and smashes through the gates of “Heaven” to get her back.
Just a thought.
Interesting story… Not sure why “Heaven” is in speech marks and I hate the last part ‘and they’ve been expecting him.’ Also ‘loses his wife to murder’ is a very strange way of saying ‘his wife is murdered.’
Overall a weak logline that leaves the reader standed with unanswered questions.
Sounds great. Sort of confused? Maybe?
My other question is why is Heaven the blame for his wife’s murder? Why are so many people praising his when he should be taking revenge on the one who killed her. Going after the one who could bring her back would not be the best choice of action it would only make the people of heaven more upset. Let alone he person is a Mortal so what power would he have against the heavens anyway. so again I rate this low
Tell me you are not this brain dead. You gave me all single star scores, so I can only guess that the structure of the logline is absolutely atrocious and that the other folks who have evaluated the logline are complete morons because they happen to find some value to the logline.
Some people believe that that a person’s soul goes to Heaven after death. For whatever story reasons I have developed, the man believes he can bring her back by taking that action. Do you want me to spell out each plot point in the logline, or will you still give it all single stars? If you are some bible nerd who cannot accept a stylized story with this kind of content, fine, but don’t go trashing other people because you cannot understand how a story might unfold within the confines of a stated logline. Don’t like the hook, great, rate it low. Story doesn’t appeal to you, great, rate it low. But WTF is the single star for overall?!
Obviously you don’t understand your own writing. I asked a question as to why the warrior would not revenge the murderer. Yet he would attack the Heavens. Why heaven to blame is what I asked because Heaven could bring the wife back yes but going in there forceful is stupid because Heaven did not kill the women, This is just a logical question.
I love action movies but just to battle just because you want to see thing blow up is stupid. Transformer yes made millions but logic it had not much of.
If you are saying that The man Knew that someone murdered his wife from heaven I understand but how did he pick that up being that Heavenly creatures can not be seen by the human eye? And they move at a light speed which we must assume being that they have to travel from space to earth in record time. How also was he able to get to heaven too is my question being that he lived in Medieval times there was no Rockets. Was there a gate way on earth some where that transport them to heaven. Wouldn’t he have to know someone of heaven who could get him there. Yes maybe they were expecting him but that too would be pointless because they could have just killed him too. Why did they have to wait for him to battle him, seriously How could a Man kill Something he knows not it’s weakness. A Blade is what kills man…That Stupid Movies Legion got a 20% rating because Guns for a Angel is Pointless. So would be a Blade against Godlike creatures
Last point you might want to take note of is that during the Medieval times or Renaissance history they were either Protestant or Catholic. Maybe you’d want to change the time period to Roman or Greek Times. Those Gods had a weakness You need to research time periods before you write subjects like these. Especially if you’d want people to believe in your story. I’m just saying. The idea is not totally terrible it just not totally acceptable to say okay. I read most of the comments although they like the idea,cause yes the first thought grabs you it’s just not sensible without these thoughts cause they will be asked
Sounds like this is a pointless battle. My question is how do you escape The people who made you if they know your every move. Not so well thought out. Try another conflict I’d suggest
Interesting logline. Medieval is a tough period to scale even with the success of Game of Thrones. You have your work cut out – but logline sounds a ride. Good job.
Love, love, love 90% of this logline! I was thrown by the last sentence…”and they’ve been expecting him.” Why did you put it in there? I personally don’t even think you need to add anything onto the first part. The addition is confusing.
The first part is so cool! So so cool! Good job. Can’t wait to read this full script.
smash through the gate of heaven, now that’s bad ass
Sweet logline! Tells it like it is paul. A job well done! 5 out of 5 stars!
Stop, you make me blush.
sounds captivating. Nice log line!
I like the story concept and the potential is high. Who and why murdered the wife? A little something in the logline could bring the story together tighter in the logline.
This is a very interesting logline. It makes me want to read the script (which is what you want it to do.) The only thing I would change is the word “unproven.” Yeah, I think I know what you mean when you use it (that the leader has yet to prove himself, maybe he got the job because of the family he was born in to or whatever,) but the word stands out in not a good way. It muddies it up and, as a reader, makes me have to stop and think for a second before I can finish the rest of the logline. You want the reader to blaze right through it and get to the end – your clever twist about Heaven waiting for him. If I were you, I’d consult a theasurus and see what the other options could be. But, that said, good job!