For Once In My Life
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For Once In My Life

1963:  Paul Stewart, an ex-seminarian, is stationed at an Army base near a small town in Bavaria where he meets a local girl, Annie who gets pregnant. His friend Matzko is killed under mysterious circumstances and Annie’s child is stillborn  for which Paul feels responsible.   It is the end of innocence, the death of Kennedy, and buildup in Vietnam, but for Paul and Annie there may be some hope for a new beginning.

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  1. March 9, 2016, 11:31 pm
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    For Once In My Life is a very personal story. After reading the information about the writer, I believe it’s also autobiographical. It gets its name from the Frank Sinatra song, which is prominently featured in the story. Due to its detailed descriptions and regional detail, the script often reads like a novel and consequently requires the reader to pay close attention to appreciate everything going on. In the tradition of films like Mash, Good Morning Viet Nam and Catch 22 the film has a military backdrop, as young protagonist, Paul Stewart drops out of the seminary in Dubuque and winds up stationed at a Bavarian army station called Bad Aibling. The plot is a coming of age romance during the time America is losing her innocence and is about to go headlong into the tumultuous changes of the mid 1960’s. The writer does a great job taking you back to that time with the attitudes and language used by the many characters that populate his wonderful story. Though I don’t remember reading his physical description, young Paul obviously has something the ladies like. Though we find out midway through the story he’s a virgin or what we used to call a “cherry boy”. With his boyish charm, Paul manages to catch the eye of two very attractive German girls named Karin and Annie. Additionally, Paul has a relationship with another more experienced soldier named Matzko, who is also a lady’s man. Though the two initially dislike each other, they wind up becoming good friends in spite of Matzko taking up with one of Paul’s girlfriends.

    FOIML is a very well crafted story with cohesive storyline, actions and scene transitions. It offers a solid three act structure with solid inciting incident, plot points, conflicts etc. It is an extremely well crafted, written by a worldly, educated writer, injecting his personal experience into the story.

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    Argent says
    July 15, 2013, 11:08 pm
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    Each scene was easy to read & made me want to continue reading to see where it would lead. I got to know each character well as the story unfolded. Your command & knowledge of the German language & how things were in Germany during that period of history was excellent. It is a sensitive story of tragedy, triumph & devotion. The ending was refreshing and left me with a happy feeling in this time of so many violent endings to movies.

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  3. Ron-Weiss says
    June 22, 2013, 2:50 am
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    Really captures the time and setting of GI’s stationed in Germany during the Kennedy era. A lot of effort shows in the detail of German culture and language. The story has a literary feel; that is its strength but also its weakness. It’s a wonderful drama but it reads better than it might play as a movie – a little more action. Paul, the main character, has depth but his naivete can wear thin. However, a well written script.

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      September 13, 2013, 7:44 pm

      Thanks for your comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read my script.

      Jeffrey

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