The Journey to Mont Saint Michel
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Fingers
A man known as Fingers, who has been alien to the human experience his entire life, makes the decision to kill himself on his thirtieth birthday. A wrench is thrown into his plan, however, when a chance encounter with a woman who is desperately trying to find her way in the world puts them both on the bumpy, yet darkly comedic, road to redemption.
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This is probably one of my top favorite scripts that i have read on here. I love the story, the characters, the whole script.
I really liked this script. Fingers is quite a character, and as for Julie, she’s great.
These two together rock!
A bit much V.O.’s and could be tighter, but other than that,
this is really good stuff!
Ron
I don’t like this script… :s
Wasn’t for me.
Nice job!
Not a bad start but needs a lot of work.
Needs some work. The plot is a bit confusing. I’m not sure about the title either.
I use my fingers for a lot of stuff.
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Thanks, very helpful.
I quite liked the story of our friend Fingers (of course I always enjoy a story about a good misanthrope). There were a few things I would have gone a touch deeper on (I didn’t exactly know why the light tower was so important to him and I wish I’d had a little more on why the cop was such a headcase [and I know there was some, but I wanted more of the deets], but I am a couple beers deep, so maybe I missed it), but overall, it was a great meditation on the way two wildly different people can come together and how even though we all have ugliness inside us, we can overcome it, or at least channel it toward a positive pursuit.
It’s not what one would think of as typically commercial, but I liked that about it. Some might see it as a problem, but I think, at least for me, it’s one of its strengths. Definitely worth a read to be certain.
I liked it. Fast moving, The story came together nicely. Interesting characters. Nice work.
I don’t mean to compare, but in a way it’s like Danny and the Deep Blue Sea meets Minnie and Moskowitz. Just ease up on the voiceovers and bring out a bit more of Chris’ story. Overall, it’s a great read. I’d like to see this on film one day. Keep up the good work Mike.
Congrats on this; should go far
keep at it but good.
meh, needs lots of formatting and will be good after a few more drafts.
It was average
are people actually READING this script? This needs a lot of work. It’s very sloppy and the structure is choppy. For example, on page 25 julie and jade have lines of dialogue in the same line. Was this edited for mistakes or just rushed through and turned it quickly?
It’s called overlapping dialogue, you imbecile. The lines are meant to be said at the same time. Even if it was a mistake, what does that have to do with structure anyway? Do you know what structure is? In addition, as I said elsewhere, grammar is not a matter of opinion. To give this one star for grammar is ridiculous. I hope your hack friend appreciates you trying to stop me from winning this competition.
Sorry, I didn’t realize you were the head hack in charge, not some other hack’s lapdog. I’ll check your script out soon and I’ll give an honest interpretation of how I feel about it. Also, I conveniently do know what structure is, so I’ll give you helpful notes on that.
Excellent writing, sir. I can easily see this as a purposely-low-budget Guy Ritchie flick.
Great, great stuff.
Best screenplay since Gymkata!
THOROUGHLY ENJOYABLE
I can personally relate to such a man who feels… alien to the human race and things of this nature. Uhhh, this screenplay could very well be one of the better screenplays in the greater Philadelphia area. Mr. Axelrod is definitely a friend to the Biaviians. His creativity is second to none, you understand.
Overall, I enjoyed this story very much. I thought the main character was hard to like very much. He has some endearing moments, but kind of a grating personality. Still, if done by the right actor/director it could be pretty entertaining flick. As others have said, your formatting could use some tweaking. I would stray away from using SMASH CUT TO or START/END CREDITS. These are all director decisions. Your dialogue is by far your strength – extremely entertaining and filled with comedic catch phrases. Best of luck and I hope it makes it to the big screen some day.
Carey Grayson
I was distracted by format issues ..Way too much technical direction(unless you’re directing)……………smash/fade, match cut, on black,………,Too many “F” bombs that don’t strengthen character, narratives like” We see the scenery,yada yada “..Ive been told.that we never say,”We see……….” Show it as a shot” CAMERA ON………..good character development, but “F” bombs totally unnecessary
i am just a chumpy newbie,…last year I was chewed out by a few well known writers and directors about the same things,so I took it all out. Been there.
Uhhh yeah yeah, right. You just keep on hating and see where that gets you in life. Keep doin what you’re doin, shame on you and all that.
The script is almost grammatically flawless. That is not a matter of opinion.
congratulations on the screenplay! It is buzzworthy.
This was a fun read. Intriguing concept. I’m curious to see it done. Congrats Mr. Axelrod.
Hilarious but grounded in a believable depression. Commendable work, Axelrodm.
Try to keep voice overs as short as possible. Get rid of your name at the top right of every page and I suggest not putting in where YOU think the credits should go, up to the director.
I LIKE TO SEE IT DONE
Fingers was awesome.
I thought that this screenplay was pretty well written. The dialogue was swinging between cruide to clicheish, but I definately got the feel of Fingers aka Thomas Thomas. I thought that the character arc was a little weak but did come out. All in all it was an enjoyable read and I can see it on the screen with the right artists.
I thought that this screenplay was pretty well written. The dialogue was swinging between cruide to clicheish, but I definately got the feel of Fingers aka Thomas Thomas. I thought that the character arc was a little weak but did come out. All in all it was an enjoyable read and I can see it on the screen with the right artists.
This screenplay is pretty damn good.
Might be worth watching.