Finding It Hard
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Rating: 2.4/5 (3 votes cast)

Finding It Hard

A story of three friends who all find themselves needing a vasectomy. Two of the characters are being pressured by their wives because they have far too many children, and have massive anxiety and irrational fears regarding the procedure. The third character is recently divorced and decides to endure the procedure as well to avoid pregnancy during his post-divorce sex rampage. To make the procedure more palatable, they decide to get a destination vasectomy in Rio… and then things get silly.

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    sarah88 says
    November 1, 2012, 11:34 pm
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    Funny but too long.

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    venus says
    November 1, 2012, 10:44 am
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    Seemed to drag on – it took them way too long to actually get to Rio. It’s an odd concept as well. It is original, I’ll give you that.. however, it needed to be structured better because there wasn’t as much flow as I’d like (especially in a comedy). There were definitely some funny moments, but also a lot of useless filler. It needs to be reworked a bit to get the ball rolling. Sorry for the low marks, I’m just being honest.

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    bsouls4 says
    October 26, 2012, 2:39 pm
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    This script is way too long, especially for a comedy. Script’s really shouldn’t be more than 120 pages, and comedies are closer to 100-110 pages. This script is 173 pages long. They don’t even mention about getting a vasectomy, which is what the film is supposed to be about, until about page 50. This should happen by page 10. They don’t even get to their trip destination in Rio until page 100! Page 100 is when the script should be close to ending! A page of script equals about a page of screen time and this movie would be close to 3 hours long, which is unheard of for a comedy.

    You should cut the first 100 pages down to about 30 pages. Take out everything that doesn’t have to do with the story, like Mitchell and Ruby and the creepy kid looking through windows. Even if these things are funny, they are unneeded to the story. Also, with the dilemma’s they find themselves in while in Rio, there’s only 2 real dilemma’s and they get out of them so quickly and easily. These dilemma’s should be what your script is focusing on and instead of expanding them, you just have the characters give the people money and everything is fine again. There’s no sense of danger if all the characters have to do is throw money at the problem. Maybe you should only have one major dilemma and they have to figure out another way of getting out of it because their ATM cards don’t work in a different country so they have to spend the entire night running from bad guys and trying to pay there debt.

    There is also a lot of grammar errors and some formatting errors, mostly just random long spaces between lines of dialogue or action that can be easily fixed.

    For the most part, I would say the dialogue was the writer’s strength, as in it sounded like real conversation that people would have. However, the dialogue mostly made the characters just seem like a bunch of assholes that you wouldn’t want to hang around with. And none of them really have any character arc. They don’t seem to have any change in them throughout the entire 173 pages. There was some exposition in the dialogue that could be dealt with better too.

    The concept is actually pretty interesting, with having three friends decide to get vasectomies together and go on one last man trip with their balls. It definitely takes the buddy/travel comedy and presents it in a new original way.

    In closing, the script definitely still needs some work, and it has to be cut to almost half of what it is. Make sure it’s 120 pages or less.

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