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A aspiring valedictorian is in her senior year, and she has always been the perfect smart student. However, her grades are dropping after she comes to a realization that all this stress won’t matter in the future.

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      asgardian says
      July 20, 2017, 12:35 am
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      Try this:

      A aspiring valedictorian realizes being the perfect student is not enough when it can’t fix her broken family.

      Add another dimension whenever possible.

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    2. Coolkareem says
      June 4, 2017, 2:50 am

      The message of this Logline seems to be illogical, the twins adjectival words used in the first sentence sound very boring: “perfect” and “smart”. And in the subsequent line the writer says that the valedictorian “realizes that all this stress won’t matter.” which stress? Being smart and perfect, or what?

      I think the writer needs to rewrite this Logline.

      Good luck

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