Everything is real
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Everything is real

What if that ominous looking puzzle in the garage of your new home wasn’t just a puzzle?

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      kccarmea says
      November 28, 2014, 7:56 pm
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      Ok, you need a hero in the logline.
      Please don’t start a logline with “what if” You can do better than that.
      You need a problem.

      example: After (hero) finds a puzzle in his new home (something happens) now he must (do something) before (something worse) happens.

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    2. SW63 says
      October 14, 2014, 9:55 am
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      OK – then what is it?

      If it’s ominous, who would be stupid enough to touch it?

      Give us more! Somebody does something to the ominous puzzle which makes something big happen and something even bigger is at stake for the protagonist.

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